Blood Shed

these tears that fall from my eyes
will i ever stop bleeding?
this blood falls from deep wounds
it only stops when you around
only my blood shall quench your thrist
my ultimate heartache
is being without you
for i can only hold on for so long
until my heat stops
and i die in your arms
will you save me from the nightmare?
shall my soul walk alone?
save my deep wounds and all this blood
dont make me cry anymore
it hurts to live through all these lies
anymore and i shall break
its all turning back now
i can't see your face in front of me
anymore trying not to die
is the hardest part of living
heal my blood shed....

Reviews

[Allison]

GREAT PIECE!!!!!!!!!!!! IT"S SIMPLY WONDERFUL!!!!!!!!!!!! I feel bad that u went through all of that, but I find that when I'm upset, and I write about it, it helps a lot. I normally don't post those, but it's good 2 know that someone has the courage to do what must be done. :)

[ebur™]

great piece. well, just like siri said, I may have to comment on here like everyone else said. It's very emotional but powerful. there's alot of description which makes it all the more better. and the last line - heal my blood shed... - just ties in the whole poem together. well done!

[Sharkapillar]

The flow is there, and boy does is stand out. As does the emotion, and though it is vague you still somehow manage to get a point across. Great write!! ♥♥

[siri]

well, I will be boring and comment on the same thing as everyone else that commented this piece. This piece screams with raw emotion. Its sad you have gone through the experiences that helped you shape this piece. I guess it wasn't all bad since you created a powerful and beautiful piece of literature.

[Johnny Monroe]

This is good, i feel like its coming with just a baseball bat swing of emotion. I had to read this a second time because each line was focusing on conveying a feeling. The best part was that the ending didn't completely resolve, but used the dots and i liked that one i did. All and all, very good and powerful!

[~Israel~]

ill always be here to heal ur wounds,if not take them for you. i like it hun. it reflects what sometimes i use to feel

[ace]

interesting very powerful emotions in this work well written and decent flow good work

[A]

Dark, emotional, and well written.