Hear Me Shout

Pain is filtering through me. It's piercing my heart. I can hardly think. My mind is wreaking havoc on me. Always just a breath away from tears. Completely terrified, I feel completely drained. The only thing keeping me going is God. I know that He cares about me. I know that He sees my pain and will find a way to fix it. A situation like this used to make me run, but I refuse to once again be a lost sheep. My shepherd is there for me. He will listen to me. He will listen to my thoughts and fears. He will wipe away my tears when I can no longer hold on. I am afraid, not wanting to see the outcome. It takes all I have plus God to keep me walking the path He created for me. Though I am never alone, I need my friends. Without them my heart is broken. The only sliver left intact is thanks to God, my Savior. I know He hears me, I know He is there for me. Still my heart breaks. I pray for a fixed friendship. I pray for His guidance in this predicament. I do not know what to do and so I am handing everything over to God. My shoulders can only bear part of the weight. Without God I am no one, without my friends I am barely alive. Friends are the angels God sends for the times He needs reinforcements. They are intertwined, life is not right without either. Iam frightened, but God is here. Hear me shout. Help me. 

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Reviews

[Eldarwen]

Hmm you could either switch the positioning of the individual sentence bits around and make a poem out of it, or you could elaborate a little bit more and make it into a more flowing story. You have what you want to say nicely written out, and the short sentences (or bits thereof) can easily be seen to represent the gasping moments where the pain takes over but it would still be nice to see a little more flow in it.

I could actually see this (if you make it a little longer and slightly more elaborate) as the prologue to a longer story or a novel even.