The Repressive Battlefield

This poem is written from a man's point of view, as he speaks about his forbidden love, and yet ignores the one who's always been there for him. Published: Creative Communications Spring 2010

The Repressive Battlefield

 

Have you ever felt it?
That feeling of dismay,
As the love of your life is walking away…and another man is in your place
But no matter how it hurts, you still smile to her face.
‘Cause all you want to do is to make her happy,
And find ways to make her smile
Because if you ever hurt her…You’d feel like you want to die
And you’d beat yourself up inside, if you ever make her cry.
So you let the pain consume you, and continue on with your days
While on looking friends and family
Can’t seem to end your pain.
You watch from a distance, as they walk hand in hand
All the while wishing, you were that man.
You’ll kill him if he hurts her
You’ll flay him if she cries,
You’ll make his life a living hell if you can’t heal her pain inside,
But forgiveness shall never be bestowed if she vanishes from your sight.
So you put your happiness on hold,
Watching as hers continues to unfold.
As you sit on the sidelines, while your void eternally grows.
This void keeping you from seeing the smallest angel sitting at your feet,
This angel carries thread and needle, with which she tends to your wounds.

Author's Note

Hello! This is a poem I wrote a year ago. I loved writing this, and I had a lot of fun writing it even though it was challenging to write it from a different gender's perspective. Hopefully you all like it =). Thank you! Please Review!

Reviews

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Wow. You're either psychic or you've dug deep inside the soul of us men. This rings very true. As usual, very impressive, my friend. Looking forward to new work from you!

[quinfinn]

i think it's astonishingly poignant, emotionally accurate to a fault and and very deeply moving. this is a deeply loving and masterful, heartfelt write, bravo!

[TJ]

This was a very good piece! all writers want to invoke emotions in their readers and you have done that with this one. Most people can relate to this situation even if they haven't been in it. I can feel the despair, sadness radiating from this writing! I love it! syllables go a little funny in the middle but all in all Great Work

[alexlessah]

very very good.

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strong emotions in this write. What does flay mean?