I enjoyed this one immensely! Your poem has the sort of feel to it that I like, almost fantastical and yet full of dark auguries. There are many memorable lines in this for me to pick just one. But If I had to, I'd have to say the first stanza was masterfully done. Nice work!
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much. I deeply appreciate the positive response... :)
Very nice. I love it. It has such a dreamy, romantic feel to it. I have a couple of suggestions, though. "Ambient" is an adjective, so I recommend maybe changing it to ambiance so you don't have to add any other descriptors and distract from the perfect length of lines you have going on. (: I also recommend changing "beautifully tragedy" to beautiful tragedy. I really love this poem, though. It has such a nice style. Great work. Keep it up. (:
Ambient is also a noun which would refer to a certain style of music that fuses electronic beats and.. read moreAmbient is also a noun which would refer to a certain style of music that fuses electronic beats and atmospheric sounds. And the "beautifully tragedy" it's a typo. lol.. thanks for pointing that out... :)
10 Years Ago
Oh. Haha. You're right. I had a blonde moment. Sorry about that. (:
I enjoyed this one immensely! Your poem has the sort of feel to it that I like, almost fantastical and yet full of dark auguries. There are many memorable lines in this for me to pick just one. But If I had to, I'd have to say the first stanza was masterfully done. Nice work!
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much. I deeply appreciate the positive response... :)
a romantic bit but with a dark flourish, a surreal quality to it. Well done. Liked the line "lies crumbling like cigarette ash.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you... I was trying to limit the dark feel to this since most of my works are darkness inspire.. read moreThank you... I was trying to limit the dark feel to this since most of my works are darkness inspired.