Dark Love

Roses are red, violets not blue

For they behold an even darker hue

And if crimson ink were like sugar sweet

Then I wish for an even bitter treat.

 

Rubies are red, sapphires blue

They glisten as drops of morning dew

Diamond tears beneath moons of jade

Lay trapped upon these darker shades

 

Cherries are red, blueberries blue

The saccharin tongue of me and you

Strawberries, plums, and rotten peaches

To delight upon the feasting leeches

 

For all the sorrows and all the woes

Still this is how the story goes

 

Roses are red, violets are blue

If sugar is sweet, then for sure not you

And so, I definitely was his treat

My crimson ink, like sugar sweet

 

Author's Note

A rough draft. Been emotionally distressed when I wrote this so please bear with me... :)

Reviews

[Caradoc]

For some reason this reminded me of Alice in Wonderland...and vampires. Especially with that last stanza; sugary sweet crimson ink. Evocative imagery and a nice take on the old and dusty "Roses are Red" rhyme.

I want a candy apple now...

Good write.

-Caradoc

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Thank you very much... I always infuse a rather dark atmosphere in my works... :)

[Juan de Rajah]

It's my first time to see your works here; they delight me in many ways. It reminds me of the fact that love, isn't really as sweet as it's portrayed by pop culture.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

You don't believe everything the pop culture shows you. It gives an illusion of life. makes you one of them. You gotta see through experiences you know? Most people would react to these experiences by what they see in pop culture. it's sad though. A lot of naive kids out there...

[TL Boehm]

Peace. the line that got me was feasting leeches. Sometimes love is beautiful and sometimes it truly - sucks the life from you. Well done

[Fréyjä Helvití]

True. Life could be a b***h sometimes. It's where I usually draw my inspiration. LOL. Thank you

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That was wickedly fun and humorously twisted. I like how you mind works.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Thank you lol. Yah I like how twisted my mind could get. XD

[Ahmad Cox]

I have to admit I loved this in a macabre and dark kind of way. It made me happy to my heart. I really loved this one.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

thank you dear...

[Ahmad Cox]

No problem. I enjoy a little extra darkness here and there when done well

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Interesting piece indeed!
Your imagery is solid! great word power, and if you were thinking as I am now, then its very metaphorical.
Interesting indeed... Going to my library.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

thank you so much...

[Sami Khalil]

For all the sorrows and all the woes
Still this is how the story goes.
Nice write.

[Julian Javier]

'tis a perfect piece for me. i wish i have a girl like thee, but i'm happy that i get to read thy work for free... oh oh lucky me having to know a poet like thee. though you are one i am yet to see... more of thy work, i crave voraciously. :)

[Fréyjä Helvití]

lol... I appreciate that dear julian. It's a pleasure to have delighted such poets as thee... :)

[Julian Javier]

the pleasure is all mine, deary. ;)

[Laura Maidah]

I liked it save for the "lo" part. If it was meant to be funny though, then nice! It cracked me up. I'm weird though.