Hallucinations

Piercing rocks and twigs scar my naked toes

And all around me screams the silence and woes

Lifted from fear, driven by sorrow

Of gothic dreams and no tomorrow.

 

Whispers from the wind devour my soul,

I shiver with fright, I lose control

The full bright moon illuminates ahead,

As I lay beneath the sky with dread

 

A reflection obscures all truth I see

Consumed by the life in my sanity

Remorse and death shall take me there

To where the ashes of my shattered heart could bear

 

Beings of darkness I dare not define

Comparable to demons, damned, horrid, nay divine

Never shall they, nay feast on my soul

Never will they take what’s left of my all

 

Soon the hour of darkened times shall fall

The Holy One Divine will give His call

Dark or Light, we bow to His presence

The only light that will brighten the decadence.

Author's Note

Amidst dark vision and fantasies, faith is tested...

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Wow! The depth to this piece is brilliant... Dark and full of mystery.

"A reflection obscures all truth I see
Consumed by the life in my sanity
Remorse and death shall take me there
To where the ashes of my shattered heart could bear"~ The heartache is felt. Well done!

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Thank you Robbie... :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You're welcome. It's a pleasure to read. :)

[Speak in Silence]

I absolutely loved it. :)

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Thank you so much...

[Speak in Silence]

You are welcome :)

[Celestial Witch Child]

Wow. I have nothing to say. This is wonderful.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Thank you...

[Corset]

I loved this one, I'm siding with the big guy :)

[Elgato]

Vittoria, WOW! This is so moving! I'm in awe, sitting and reading your poem again, digesting it, each stanza a feast. Thank you for an expression which, for me, is so vivid and a declaration which pierces me.
Elgato.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Thank you so much Elgato... :)

[Serenity Faith]

A mysterious write indeed. I find comfort in this darkness you described though, instead of fear. I'm still not quite sure why, it struck me as beautiful. A sad comforting beauty. Well done!

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Resurfacing from the depths of darkness.. From fear conjures strength... thank you...

[Dez H.]

"Soon the hour of darkened times shall fall, The Holy one divine will give his call." I love this it is so dark but gives off so much light. You never cease to amaze me with your words. You have an incredible talent and when not if you get your own book of poetry i want it because your s**t is epic. Ms lady you are the s**t.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

I'm deeply flattered by your compliments... Thank you... :)

[Fréyjä Helvití]

I'm deeply flattered.. Thank you Dez...

[GunMetal]

Your words carry a weight of shadows. I dig the format, and your style is very refined. Nice work.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Thank you...

[Amelie]

You are a muse of macabre brilliance my friend. However, you might want to go over again with the few technical lapses like syntax and "Whispers from the wind devours (devour) my soul" but nah, it's just a tiny miss. And a few suggestions if you don't mind:
The Holy One Divine will give His call (it sounded a bit off. you might want to consider "The Holy, the Divine one will give his call- can be with or without "one") It gives profoundness to the element (God). And you might want to tweak "Dark or Light, we bow to His presence". A little odd in the continuity of your tone.
Nevertheless, a fantastic piece and I took delight on it :)

[Fréyjä Helvití]

I respect your opinion... But if the line was to be "The Holy, the Divine one will give his call" I would find the rythm of the poem to be off. So I think it's fine that way.
"Dark and Light, we bow to His presence" Dark and light also referring to good and evil. I'm descirbing here the image of some kind of apocalypse. Thank your for sharing your thoughts. I do appreciate it.. :)

[Amelie]

I just referred on your 2nd to the last stanza: Incomparable to demons, damned, horrid, nay divine- that is why I was concerned with the continuity of your rhythm. I'm into metered poetry and so yeah just wanna share my deductions. But then again I respect your justification :) And just on the "we bow to his presence" but then again, you don't necessarily have to be superfluous. if the outcome gives you a sense of content,then you are on the right track. artists as we are, we know where we stand :)

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Thank you... I trully respect that. Poems don't seriously display a single interpretation... I'm still working on improving a lot in my writing... In my poem, It describes dark fantasies of course which reveals finally at the end, a faith in God that will never receed. Oh! and my mistake.. it should be "Comparable to demons, damned, horrid, nay divine." sorry for this slight error... how it makes it clearer for you... :)

[Fréyjä Helvití]

"Hope it makes it clearer for you"