Ode to Forgotten Memories

 

I frown, my hope dies,

Blown away with sands of time-

Lights out, slow sunset,

I wish silent my face wet.

 

I smile as I splash in

Pools of happy memories-

I laugh and I cry and

When I forget, inside I die.

 

Peace for you, but not for me.

Author's Note

Any and all feedback is appreciated. Thanks.

Reviews

[Kelley Pascoe]

Peace for you, but not for me was a very strong way to end a poem. I loved every word in this piece and another line I really liked was...........................
"When I forget, inside I die." It saddens my heart to know a person can feel so sad. This was a great write Aista Aini! thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost

[Sweet Addictions Is Stu..]

so sad and so true Very beautiful.
Great job

[Selena Chapman]

Sometimes it seems that all we are is our memory. To remember people, places and things, to be remembered by others, whilst we live and after we leave this place. Yet old memories are replaced by new and it can be difficult to hold onto them. A poignant piece, giving the reader pause for thought. Well done!

[Silvia - Scribo, Ergo S..]

A wonderful poem about the power of memories!

[Ismael Rodriguez Jr.]

nicely done not everyone can say this much in such a short poem.

[*~*me*~*]

It's short, but still very good.
Liked it a lot.

[Bob Carney, "Soon ..]

I smile as I splash in
Pools of happy memories

Great imagery here, who doesn't feel joy in good memories? Water seems to convey mood as well, so it's a good choice for a comparison.

I laugh and I cry and
When I forget, inside I die.

Again, very strong ties with emotions and memories. What makes a person a person is in part, the sum of their memories, a blueprint to their life. Forgetting is to lose sense of yourself, in effect, dying. Christ that's good.

Peace for you, but not for me.

There is no peace for a person who wallows in the bad memories or loses sense of themself. Death might be the only peace they find, but not for this poor soul. Spiritually, they are decaying, but they live on in limbo and have no satisfaction. Peace to those that don't deal with the storeroom of memories the writer has to and he envies them for that. At least, that's how I read it. This was a really excellent write. Quick, concise and poetic.

[Heart Of A Wolf]

Good way to put this here. Thanks for sending it to me.

[Robert Luna]

This very deep and a thinker piece. I really enjoyed the way you conveyed yourself and words in this one a lot. Very strong voice but in a passive style.

Great Job!!!

[Colin H.]

i like short effective stuff like this