The Patriot

A country independence struggle poem

Let the body mingle

                             Amid the dust of my country

Let my country men would walk

                            Over my shoulders

Let my bones and flesh fill

                            The pits along the path of my country’s independent struggle.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I liked the development of your lines...
the thought process is evident...
I do have a question in the second line:

Let my country men would walk
Over my shoulders
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Let my country men who would walk
Over my shoulders...
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is what I believe you want to say there...

as for the theme of this speaks much...
for those that die and those who carry on...
for the freedom to be who they are as a country...