Mystery

Dark, nearly black.

Moving with grace,

Leaving blood behind,

He stalked forwards.

There she was, 

His pray,

His beloved,

His partner for eternity,

His destined wife.

She was fragile and scared,

Covering in fear like some pup.

She watched him, 

Longing for his touch,

But scared.

There was mystery and death.

There was bloody cries.

There was his cruel gaze.

Still, there was love

Reviews

[Leo]

Reads smoothly from start to finish..in some cultures they name their sons predatory animal names such as leopard while female daughters can be named deer and they make jokes: ok leopard go get that beautiful deer..the intensity of your poem symbolized this concept in my eyes

[Leo]

short and sweet..and easy to read :)..haha that rhymed..mysterious indeed yet unfolds beautifully

[Adam Adams]

Wives're always fragile so .. I guess, that's the reason, it's so easy to cut 'em in pieces .. No? Very extraordinary poetry it is (if it's looked as crime genres ...), full of mystery, love and romance. Since I was reading, I made a view in mind like:

"... a man & woman in love, loved each other to death then suddenly something happened in b/w them & men stabbed the lady-his "fragile" wife & cut her into pieces ... the blood strewn all ov'r the floor in the brace of shakes ... everything was blooded ... all ov'r the floor. The next moment, when he turned around, he saw his wife standing back to him ... "

If the story's something like that .. it'd be utter horrible and if it's not going in that way .. then it must be only 'bout killer ... who loved a girl, married to her and then .. dragged her to death.

Sounds good. Am looking forward to reading what comes next!

[SoulWriter]

Well that is an interesting review. Never thought of something like that but I am really happy that you told me your thoughts

[CC Faye]

I like the concept, but I don't think the title is in match with the poem.
The poem is too short, and I think it's a little bit common. It doesn't have a spark of mystery between the girl and the boy. Try to wrap it up, like creating ups and downs about the boy and the girl.
It's more like reading a short story with descriptions than a poem.
Still you should improve this piece. Great work!

[Mayank]

Some boys are dangerous, what about love? nobody knows.