And then we met

I have always tried to hide my emotions. The best place for me to do so was the local park. I went out there to think everything through. If I wanted to shout, I would scream at the top of my lungs. If I wanted to cry, I wept and let out all the emotions that had been built up deep inside of me. 

I thought that nobody heard me and nobody saw me. Even if I fell apart, no one would see it. I thought that I was safe and I could space out in my little world that doesn't bring so much pain. I didn't expect anyone to find me on one of the old benches in the huge local park behind the castle...

When suddenly, I heard a branch crack nearby. I turned and saw a boy my age. The first thing that came to mind was that "He saw me crying" ...I waited for a moment thinking he would laugh... but he didn't. Surprisingly he just came near me and sat down on the bench next to me. Then the only noise that broke the silence was my sobbing, as he just sat there silently, with his worried eyes fixed at me.

Few minutes later I calmed down. The boy just looked at me with concerned eyes. 

"Sorry I didn't mean to scare you. Are you alright?" He asked

He spoke so gently that I almost believed that he was really concerned. But I knew people like him, people trying to deceive you and make a fool out of you for their own amusement. So I didn't reply... I just sat there silently and waited for the moment he would start laughing and say that I am ugly like everyone always did.

"Actually this isn't the first time iv'e seen you here. I just have never been able to bring myself to come and ask what's wrong?"

This took me by surprise. I didn't how to answer. I just looked at him and thought how could I have not seen him all this time

"I'm sorry. I didn't mean to watch you crying. I just happened to pass by. I'm Erik, by the way. What's your name? "

My mind was racing, and I just blurted out ,"I'm Caitlin."

That is how I met him for the very first time.

Reviews

[Eleanor]

A nice job at the opening. I'm not criticizing but maybe you could explain everything a bit better. Like what the girl is going through and what the boy thought when he saw her everyday.
Maybe you would tell this in other chapters :) I'll wait.
Great job! :)
Thank you.

[SoulWriter]

I actually saved all the explanation for the next chapter

[Eleanor]

Ah suspense huh? :p
Well I'm excited for the next chapter :) I loved the starting!

[SoulWriter]

Thank you!

[Darl Nightingale]

This is a very powerful start. The content is all there, and the ideas are so strong. There is a lack of complexity that, if kept consistent, could create an amazing atmosphere. If you ever need anyone to edit for grammar, I'd be more than willing. Your piece is amazing and has outstanding potential. Keep it up.

[SoulWriter]

Thank you! I will remember that

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice opening chapter. Gave some history and create a interesting situation. I like the open ending. Left the reader with the need to know more. Thank you for sharing the excellent chapter.
Coyote