Giving Up

All I have I have given

People drive it out of me when there is nothing to be driven

There are a lot of things running through my mind

I am worried that my friends cannot handle what they will find

I feel like I have to give up this fight

My life feels like its draining and so I see the white light

There is no life left in me now as I take my last breathe

The only thing left to do is accept death

The hands of my life fold

As my blood runs cold

I give up my soul to show where my loyalty lies

Looking into my face all you see are soulless eyes

To all that I love remember that I will always love you

Remember that watching over you is what I am here to do

When I go promise you will smile

It will help to cheer you up at least for a little while

Reviews

[elizabeth ledet]

the rhyme scheme is a little elementary, experiment more with other more uncommon words, it will add interest.
also it's important to note that your goal is not only to rhyme but to creature an interesting rhythm that flows easily.
other than that, you capture your feelings very well and I'd love to see you develop your writing more. keep it up!