Love And Care

All my life I have waited

In all my writings it has been stated

I have not had and don’t have anything to hide

If you want me to listen you will have to hit me in stride

I am having to good of a time to slow down

And if I slow down it will make her think I am a clown

I just want in this whole relationship for her to be happy

And yes it would be nice to know that when she is stressed she thinks of me

I don’t know exactly how she will feel about all of this

It is completely up to her if she gets that first kiss

I have given control of her happiness up to her

What ever she wants done that will make her happy will occur

There is only one thing that will make me stop

And that’s if she tells me to let my effort to make her happy drop

Nine times out of ten that you see me my heart has run cold

But seeing her instantly warms me and never gets old

I know we will go a lot of places together although I am not sure where

All she needs to know is that from me she will always get my love and care

Reviews

[Shade Teller]

This was a well thought out poem. I like the emotion that it had and the care that it shows towards that one person. The only trouble I had was the rhythm. Some of it did not work for me. With some of the rhythm abnormal, the rhymes themselves seemed out of place. I would try to find a way to make the rhythm much more smoother and that way the rhymes wont seem so awkward. Good job and keep up the good work.