Letting Go

The Fear Of Drowning

Thrashing abortively against the force.
All in vain,
the violent crashes keep me,
as brilliant blue overcomes
panicked breathe.

Below chaos lies
a hauntingly beautiful pitch.
The muffled silence drowns out
the hollow beating of my heart.

An aching inner swathe is failing life's hold.

I must choose to let go,
succumb to the serene abyss below.
In slow descend, the darkness engulfs me.
There is no going back.

Breathless fear erupts within
and in somber surrender...

I inhale.

Author's Note

Critiques?

Reviews

[I Shred This Cabbage]

a violently beautiful opening, 'thrashing abortively...' Following the vortex of thoughts that are whirling inside my head, I would say a suddenly feverish and somehow turmoil has seized hold of her (the protagonist) in place of her heart's slumber and torpor. It's like the descriptions are in fact the preparations that have to be made. All her energy is strained in order to think of everything, her heart beating and beating, thumping so badly that it be ones impossible to breathe. Really quite brilliant.

[I Shred This Cabbage]

# becomes impossible

[SoulSplatter]

Thank you very much! Drowning has always been a fear of mine, ive had much time to think on it hahaha. :) Im glad you enjoyed it.

[I Shred This Cabbage]

I very much enjoyed it, really expressive language...

Ha! You need to stop dwelling on such things, think of floating gracefully on the surface instead :)

[SoulSplatter]

;) I can't help it, I think too much, but I guess that is a good thing when you are a writer haha

[I Shred This Cabbage]

Yes, it would certainly seem to be a good thing to think while writing...an option many seem to ignore ;p

[SoulSplatter]

hahaha that is true

[Peter H]

the write is well done , giving into your darkness can be sometimes the best choice i guess but its not the only choice i love the piece well done .

[SoulSplatter]

Thank you, its actually about drowning, not giving into darkness ;)