Snow White

There I was, mouth parted
cheeks a blush.

Lips crushed as
my teeth sunk in
to that glorious red apple
of sin.

Poison seeps within,
delectable death
running down my chin.

But I couldn't help it, you see.
Couldn't help but agree
when you asked me to meet you
by the apple tree.

Quilted by bowing branch
of forbidden fruit, the world in mute.
I'm enchanted by its magnetic bounds.

Audacity plucked the apple
and my gall seems endless.

My curiosity beat me senseless
so I rested  beneath your bough,
utterly defenseless.

And there I was, lips parted,
cheeks a pale snow white.

Dreams crushed in the twilight,
for the sake of just one bite.

Reviews

[Helene K. S. Jensen]

Really great. Forbidden fruit, lust and consequences. I love your choise of word, and the refrence to Snow White, though the refrence to the apple and the apple tree reminded me more of the story of Adam and Eve. Great rhyth, too, by the way. I flows really well.

[SoulSplatter]

Thank you for your kind words! Yes I did have the feel of Adam and Eve when I finished writing it, but the image of snow white in my head. It took on a life of its own. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Good flow, a bit of a wicked write. Very nicely done!

[SoulSplatter]

Thank you very much! I like being wicked :D

[Melissa Hoover]

Nice work here

[SoulSplatter]

thank you!!

[zainul]

Very creative imagination.
Enjoyed reading.

[SoulSplatter]

Thank you so much! Im glad you liked it :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
The pleasure is mine :)

[Chris]

good twists

[Bare trees]

A pleasure to read. The apple (as part of the bible) is a metaphor to me as is the snake. You did a great job on this.

[SoulSplatter]

Thank you very much!

[Bare trees]

You're welcome. Just to clarify, I realize there is no snake in this poem, I was just referring to the bible itself. I could have worded that better. Good stuff.

[SoulSplatter]

I got what you meant ;)

[Bare trees]

:)

[OfDeathandLove]

I loved this. It brings a familiar story and adds a new idea to it. And, just to say, the word choice was absolutely wonderful.

[SoulSplatter]

Thank you! I am so glad that you liked it!