Chapter 1 - Arrival

He arrives. After so many years.

"Argh!"- Michel yelled as he fell down into some bushes. 

"W-what the f**k?!" - He said. - "Where the hell am I?" He never saw this place before. And he had little to no memories about himself either. In general, he was lost. 

"Hello! Anybody there?" - He shouted from the top of his lungs. But the only thing he heard was shuffling from some shrubs and a very light breeze to wish him hello. 

"F**k! What now?! I'm lost in the f*****g middle of f*****g nowhere!!! Goddamnit!" 

He had so many mixed feelings. He felt anger, sadness, confusion and so many other emotions he couldn't decyfer. The trees who's leafs were dark blue was just doing it's little dance on a breeze, ignoring the lost and desperate passenger who came out of nowhere. The grass sparkled on the weak sun that was shining and trying to give warmth to everything and everybody that lived. There were little clouds that were a bit blue and that were minding their own business. Nobody wanted to help Michel. 

But this realm in general has been known for cruelty over the passengers that come there. If you can't get used to the lifestyles there, then you're done! In worst case, you can get discharged! But our hero doesn't know that. And he'll have a lot of trouble because of that. But what kind of trouble and difficulties he'll face? Find out in the next chapter.

Reviews

[matrixmark]

So this is quite an intriguing beginning. Your brevity of descriptions are well matched to the shortness of the piece.
Change this bit - But the only thing he heard is shuffling - Change the word 'is' to 'was'
There are a few more things to change BUT all of that comes with time as a writer. The general layout of this story could go in mny, many directions. It has me in particular questioning where this guy is going to end up and how will he get there. It defintely has a sci fi maybe even fantasy feel to the story.
Your sentences are of good length but a couple could be tightened. But saying that, it is nothing to serious to amend and certainly didn't take away the flow of your work. Certainly was and is a different piece as to what I normally read, but being different is always good in my book (no pun intended)
I do hope you continue with the story, as I for one want to know what discoveries Michel is going to encounter.

Keep writing!

Mark.

[SoulShatter]

Thank you so much for your review! It is very helpful to me!

[matrixmark]

Not a problem. It was a good read. I am well known for my change this bit comments. So if ever you see them (Sometimes lots can appear) DON'T take them the wrong way, they are only there to help.

Mark.