bathwater

just a little nothing poem comparing someone to bathwater...

I find you gray

like soap water

and the second you step into

the clearest of blue

lakes and oceans

weep

because you're dirty

used up

like soap water

bathwater

you can't really be used

unless someone filtered out

all the bad, anything making you so

melancholy

so sleepy and gray

you're bathwater

but you refuse

to drain.

Author's Note

....comments are loved :3

Reviews

[Bud]

This is one Brilliant analogy you have penned. Never would've thought of bathwater as a comparison. Excellent work.

[Lexi Nicole]

Ohh, very nicely written. I like it! I love the comparison between the person and the bathwater, it worked perfectly. Really great work! :)

[Tina Kline]

This person doesn't sound like someone so cool! I really love how you used bathwater so grandly to describe this person. Excellent and awesome!