Essence (Confessions) In The Air

There’s feathers floating in the air

Soft plush stars, ripped from tender skin

Wings and scars and skin and hair

All these things, floating in the air

 

They’re an aroma of life around you

Pieces of broken angels and replicas of hate

Certain things will never change, that is true

But they’ll always be in the air, parts of you.

 

Last mornings and sleepless nights

Ending with mortal fear and sweating bodies

Painful pins and loving needles, fires to ignite

Laugh it off, smile away, a cutter’s own delight

Just remember who you’ll be

When you don’t sleep tonight.

Author's Note

I seem to have an issue using proper grammar in poetry, but I don't really care. XD Let me know what you think, title's iffy, if you can come up with something better or that catches my attention then let me know, mmkay? 'kay.

Anyway, let me know what you think, please :3

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

i actually thought the title was kind of catchy... i thought you did a great job on this piece the imagery and rhyme were perfect in this... a very deep piece to me and kind of thought provoking in a way... overall a very interesting and unique write....a very impressive job on this...

[Eric Cox]

Written well, very unique.

[Bud]

You have penned yet another Wonderful piece of your Magnificent art. The flow has a most natural feel to it. Has a very emotional feel to it. Outstanding. Hope all is well?

[Tina Kline]

The words to this are very pretty but there seems to be a dark side to this, a kind of emotional torture going on. For me this poem speaks of someone who is cutting themselves, trying to find relief from some inner torment. All the things in the air are just symbols of their torment. Over all, well done, an excellent job. I really like this write.

[Georgia Gypsy]

I like the title, and think the image is that of a person trying to sleep, and tearing at their pillow ripping it open --thereby allowing the feather's to fly everywhere....like the way our dreams float and drift over us at times. (okay, sorry for trying to write a book on this) sometime i go on and on...

i didnt see any bad grammer...IDK what you're talking about:P..lol