You Said

....Again, can't really explain it.

I KNOW YOU
It screams
I KNOW YOU
Pointing fingers
Saying names
They are real
I KNOW YOU
YOU HURT
YOU ALWAYS ALWAYS HURT
HURT.
I know you
I was you
You became the worst
You were horrible
I know you
You were there
You saw you hurt
You took
You said
You said
You said
I’LL HURT YOU
And you did.

Author's Note

I'll have to do this when I'm angry. Really, the idea to this is to just clear your mind and TYPE. Let your hands and heart say what you can't.

So, I did.

What do you think?

Reviews

[Voice11]

This is actually one of the best ways to get out emotions. If you spend time just trying to think of rhyming and structure your not getting the emotions out. Good work!

[.Bunnie.]

Hmm...what I think, is it's confusing. CERTAINLY not a bad piece of work--I loved it--but it's confusing. I don't quite get what you're saying--and I don't think you do, either. The emotions ring loud and true, accusations from another or perhaps from yourself to yourself. It's a painful and pissed off piece, but full of confusion. The ending part makes me think of a cutter. Maybe not exactly a cutter, but someone who follows far too closely along those guidelines.

Put simply...I think the entire piece is a ball of confused, pent-up, unhealthy emotions.

I'm curious. What/Who is the "it" that is the accuser? ^.^ Email me...I'd love to know.

(And a wee bit of advice that I've learned the hard way in life...just get over it. Move on. I GUARANTEE you, whatever problems you're sitting here torturing yourself over, NOBODY else is hurting because of it, and the person hurting you probably couldn't give two s***s that you're hurting--and they would certainly deny any wrong doing. Simplified: you're the only one hurting, and you've now become your own torturer.)

:) 10/10

[Bud]

Abuse is never an easy thing to deal with. We all have to deal with the things in life we never ask for, and really don't deserve. With that, we all deal with it the best way we can. Not all ways work for each. We have to find what is best for each of us, like the many medicines available don't work for everyone. I have noticed you venting on a subject that is hard to discuss. I give you many applause for your efforts and achievement. I also, encourage you to keep on writing. It will only help you. Yes, some things are simply much easier to write, rather than vocalize them. Strange, but true. I feel for you. Know that someone does care about you. Someone who has much understanding of things. If you ever need to talk, email me.

As always, this is a Remarkable piece. It has captured the torment that one who has been abused is left dealing with. A torment the violator doesn't care about. Time, effort, and a belief that it will be does make things better in the long run. It takes more time to undo what has been done wrong...always, in every situation. Keep on keeping on!

[Georgia Gypsy]

Felt the anger all the way through, frustrating, unbridled ANGER!
It yells to me of having an argument with a parent or some other adult or authority figure....(from a childs point of view), how they dont listen, wont see reason, and wont believe even if you are telling the truth....

a very powerful piece of writing, you did a great job!
keep it up....sometimes the best work is borne of high emotion whether it is happy or sad, angry or otherwise!
keep writing!:)