Do As I Say.

... I don't really know how to explain this.

If I have to hear your voice in my head tonight--

F**k it all

Do you hear that? 

I hear it too

Yes, I hear it too

Do you remember?

Hardly anymore

I hear your voice

Hardly anymore

Spoken violently and yelled

Commands

DO AS I SAY

Commands me

I hear you voice

hardly anymore

Sweet and soft

lovely

close my eyes

I see that face

hardly there

disgrace

trapped in an open space

people talk

they laugh

no one hears

no one hears

I hear your voice

See your face

Dark and light

trapped

no one knows

no one will

memories will fade

yours can't stay

Do you remember?

Yes

Everything.

Author's Note

Not so much as a poem as a sort of writing "Exercise". Basically, I saw this movie a long time ago, Sixth Sense or something, and in it this psychologist guy has his patient get a piece of paper and a pen. The patients clears their mind and just lets their hand do the writing.

So, I did that same with mah laptop.

I actually really like it, and it's a great stress reliever.

Reviews

[Voice11]

Two lines after "Do as I say" I think it is supposed to be "Your" voice. Good exercise. I've done something like it before

[Bud]

I forget the name they give that type of therapy, but it is used for many reasons. One is the release of emotions. This is an Magnificent piece, Aveira. This piece speaks of a violator who has victimized the writer. Not only in the sense of physical abuse. It speaks of the abusive abrasions left in the mind. These things are never forgotten, so we are told. But I have found that if those memories go long enough untouched, not recalled, then they become as good as forgotten. Outstanding piece, Aveira! Keep up the Excellent works of poetic art!

[cest la vie]

Well for free-flo, this is really good. The message is smooth and clear, so I say wipe your mind and keep the ink aflowing(or keyboard keys). Nicely done!

[SilentDreamer]

Nice. I agree with Kelli:) When you write when you're mad things just flow. I really liked this poem and I'm glad you shared. :D Good job and keep writing.

[Georgia Gypsy]

It is a great way to vent, or just free write! I think you did an excellent job! the unitended is sometimes the best work we produce!

try it when your angry! then you'll really see how powerful emotions are!