Divides

There's supposed to be a light there-

bright and forgiving, welcoming and living-

but it's dark all around, there isn't a sound

except for my hollow breathing.

There's supposed to be a light there-

gentle and true, but all I see is you-

standing alone with a pain all your own

and unshed tears hiding behind your eyes.

There's supposed to be a light there-

sweet and seductive, dangerous, destructive-

as it rips darkness from skin and divides pain from sin

while we wait for the light to shine.

Author's Note

I couldn't figure out a good title for this, so I took a word from my favorite line instead. I figured it'd make sense, right?
Riiiiight.
Anyway, I'd love to know what you think, comments and crit appreciated. ^_^

Reviews

[Voice11]

This has a lot of meaning in it, at least to me. In personal issues I've gone through with my friends. This is also being added. =)

[Georgia Gypsy]

The title is perfect! I am overwhelmed with the imagry and feeling you put into this. Darkness can be friend or foe, you have definately captured the foe side of it.
I wish i could find something to be critical about you're writing but I have nothing but praise!
another spot in my favorites...:)

[Bud]

The title seems perfect to me. The cold, empty stare in a wounded souls eyes is a division of life and sorrows. The pains that are confined within show through the eyes. It is said that the eyes are a direct link to ones soul. Let there be light! Lest we die! Your Talent keeps on shining through, Aveira. Another Excellent piece of poetic art from you! Keep up your Outstanding creations.

[Sean M. Addams]

nice job .... like the imagery in this alot.... i like the last stanza the most in this overall a very create piece.

[Lexi Nicole]

Awesome! I love it. The flow and rhyming are both perfect and I love the emotions it portrays.

-Howl