Once More, With Feeling

Feelings come running back with only one gentle smile and a promise.

Deep within, as wind drags over an icy plain of regret

feelings are lost, but senses stay

Whispering things better left forgotten

and questions with no answers fall silently upon lips

with no smiles left to give.

 

Happiness was the first to go,

laughing all the way.

Hope went flying with it,

saying it'd be back another day.

Sadness dragged it's tired feet,

and left with a defeated sigh,

Defiance came running back,

willing for one more try.

Anger ran out screaming,

fingers ripping out hair,

Pain went out with it,

looking for a heart to share.

 

And then a tired smile spreads across handsome features

Willing the feelings back with a gentle touch

and the heart feels again, as it did,

once more.

 

Author's Note

.....Okay, to be honest this was supposed to be completely different than how it came out, but once I got past the first stanza it took a turn for the better, in my opinion. (Better as in it was supposed to be incredibly sad and I gave it hope) Once I got to the feelings part I couldn't stop- and the title came to me after I wrote it. I'd love to know what you think! <3

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

i really like this one .... deep and alot of emotions going through this one... overall nice job on this.... another brillant write from you. fav lines..And then a tired smile spreads across handsome features


Willing the feelings back with a gentle touch


and the heart feels again, as it did,..... nice detail!!!


once more.

[Voice11]

This is absolutely amazing. I love the second stanza! I'm adding this to my favs just to let you know =)

[Taylor H.]

amazing! This was great! You need to be published!

[Flo_writer]

Great Job, I loved the section feelings and the action you wrote for all. Especially since they rhymed.

"Happiness was the first to go,
laughing all the way.
Hope went flying with it,
saying it'd be back another day.
Sadness dragged it's tired feet,
and left with a defeated sigh,
Defiance came running back,
willing for one more try.
Anger ran out screaming,
fingers ripping out hair,
Pain went out with it,
looking for a heart to share. "

If this isn't poetry I don't know what is.

[Angel Bird]

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Sensitive and profound emotional write of which I love each and every single line.
I could not tell a favorite line for I love every detail of it!
Fabulous work!
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[Lexi Nicole]

I love this one, I think it's one of my favorites by you! I'm glad it took a turn for the better. Very nice work!

-Howl

[Georgia Gypsy]

Awesome! Applauding!!!! I love how it turned out! Sometimes when you start writing you want one thing but the poem wants something completely different!
I would love to read this to my poetry group....with you're permission...:)

[Bud]

Hope has great strength. If it is only given a sliver of a chance, it will charge through the door like a raging bull. The chance is desire. We all desire to have the feelings that love encompasses. When that strong, delicate, and fragile glass cracks or shatters we have an even greater desire to regain feelings of love. Therefore, igniting hope. That smile, look or any acknowledgment of interest is all that is needed to move mountains...conquer the universe. This Excellent piece of poetic art reflects just that. The former negative, and hurtful feelings are replaced in an instant with the optimistic feelings that hope brings to light.

[deeps]

It's kinda deep but i liked it alot
I think it's very well written