Pain You Feel

Until you recognize the feelings within, you can only wait for the day to being.

Angry marks left on your skin

a piece of you will be missing

feel the terror before it begins,

God, I feel it coming.

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Beautiful eyes turn cold gray

with a depression that lingers

through out  the day.

Beneath desperate hope

and a pain so visible it's almost unclear

to determine what it is you feel

as memories draw near.

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From the moment the memories surface

to the second you open your eyes

From the moment the nightmares take you

No one will hear your cries.

Until you recognize the feelings within

You can only wait for the day to begin.

 

Author's Note

....I'm unsure of the title for this one, and the ending. I like it, though. What'cha think? ^~^

Reviews

[Georgia Gypsy]

I really like it...i've read it three times., i get something different each time i read it.
the first time i thought its about a bad dream(cause most of you're work is), the second time i thought its about a bad memory of something terrible that happened, the third time i realized its a combination plus something else i cannot put my finger on...i'll have to ponder it awhile!
great job...!:)

[Voice11]

This is a favorite of mine! you use very good language to describe depression and pain. I love the picture too. Great write

[Taylor H.]

sorry, forgot to give you a rating lol

[Taylor H.]

i loved the last line of the first stanza. Great poem. The title fits I think.

[Taylor H]

the only thing i could say was i thought it ended to soon. other than that, this was once again a great poem. great job. this poem fload (sp?) lol so well. i really liked it

[deeps]

This is so wonderful A most enjoyable read
I like dark writes and i think is written so well

[Sean M. Addams]

like the darkness in this piece alot.... thought you did a nice job with it... overall a very impressive write... fav lines...Beautiful eyes turn cold gray


with a depression that lingers


through out the day.


Beneath desperate hope


and a pain so visible it's almost unclear


to determine what it is you feel


as memories draw near.

[Bud]

I think you have hit the mark! Until one understands what they are feeling, why they are feeling that way, and what influences caused those feelings, they will not come into a sense of being. Excellent write!

[Lexi Nicole]

Ohh, very nice. A little dark but it has a kind of lighter ending. Nice work!

-Howl