HellFire Angel (Freefalling)

You falter as you fly

trying to live a lie

you are weak you are frail

and you are walking the wrong trail

you're a hellfire angel, nothing more or less

longing for a sweet caress

but you're desperate, you'll kill

you haven't the will

and you're blinded, you're falling

heaven's out of sight but you're still calling

close your eyes, pray but no one hears you

freefalling with the hope that someone will catch you

you're burning up baby, it isn't hard to see

but it's alright, I'll take your hand and let you follow me.

Tomorrow is a new day,

in the light you'll find a new way.

Author's Note

XD The red lines were written by Howl, we wrote this together over AIM, we used to do this a lot in our grammar school lol. One of our best! If you review this, please review her writing too! She did half the work on this, and since she isn't posting a version then that's the least we could do lol XD

Reviews

[Voice11]

The only thing not so good is that the poem seems a little broken in how it flows. But I can understand with two people writing it, how that can affect it. Other than that it is a really great poem. Kudos to the both of you. =)

[Tallulah]

love rhis. i remember when we used tk do rhis. i miss it. this is great never would have guessed it was by two different people.
"freefallong with the hope that someone will catch you." thats my fave line.

[Winter Poison]

:o That was amazing. Nice work! I love the rhyme scheme.

[Aurora Night]

The writing is great. I loved it. Both of you did a great job. You both work well together. I'm glad i had a chance to read it.

[Lexi Nicole]

Ahhh this was fun. I like how I'm basically reviewing my own work here...Oh well! We did good with this. We need to do one with the whole group soon. I sense a chatroom in the near future...XD

-Howl