Break You

Break You

A Poem by Marlena
"

You shattered so....Easily.

"

You broke so easily,
Little Puppet,
You screamed so perfectly, so loud,
You begged, you pleaded,
and you bled
My Puppet, you bled...

You did everything I asked you to do,
Just as I asked,
just as I had wanted,
My toy,
My Little Puppet with the sad yellow eyes,
your skin was like porcelain,
and you shattered like it, too.  

© 2009 Marlena


Author's Note

Marlena
*evil laugh* I love writing like this. Let me know what you think.

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I wrote a poem called "Break Me"

But let's say yours is much much better even though I say that a lot it's true lol your talented and people have no right to say your not! Good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Evil...demented...good start. Develop the character a bit more and it will be perfect

Posted 14 Years Ago


THis was amazing. I loved it. THe imagery and description was amazing. THe wording was great and it all flowed so well together.


Posted 15 Years Ago


...and the blood flows out, washing away the urge to massacre. Peace will follow... for a little while, at least.

You are very talented, sir!

Posted 15 Years Ago


This is scary s**t almost sounds like rape to me, I know! In the city it happen easy and no body hears you scream nobody. you can beg an they dont stop and you bleed an they dont care ,ya you just a pupet to them. you got true words here hopen it diden happen to you.

Posted 15 Years Ago


wow, dark and wicked. Nicely done!

Posted 15 Years Ago



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