Ballad Of Jane Doe

Inspired by a friends poem called 'Ode to Kali'

She washed herself with vinegar…..

to wash away the strain

to wash away the pain

to wash away the loneliness

to wash away the emptiness

 

 

The devil held out a warm hand…..

she lusted after lechery

she lusted after treachery

she lusted after bitterness

she lusted after abusiveness

 

 

On her deathbed, the devil laughed and deserted her

All alone she lay, wires sticking out of her

Angels descended from heaven, said “For heaven’s sake let your pride go!”

She saw the light and accepted God…..Doctors pronounced the death of Jane Doe.

Author's Note

I think people turn out the way they do sometimes simply because they are a victim of circumstance. Hopefully someday even if its at last moments they get redeemed on some level!

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was so amazing. I really love this. The emotions within this piece were really well portrayed. I can feel the pain, emptiness, loneliness, and strain that she is feeling. I could feel her death as well. I love the imagery to this as well. Good job. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Kyla H]

Very peculiar work, but it's also very unique! Nicely done!

[Linda]

Wohoo, this is one of the best I have ever read xxxxx

[GawjusGirl]

interesting,,

[StarSandwich]

This is intresting. Different and cool. Much like for this poem :D

[Sarah Hobbit]

Heaven will be a beautiful place for thoses who let their pride go. thank you for a interesting and good poem.
Sarah :-)

[Sukriti Suki]

hmmmm..interesting. Very clever. I like the repetition of the format. Overall a very enjoyable read.

[..]

...quite the poetic write, i love the rhythm of this.

[Yina]

I absolutely love the way this turned out!!:)

[ImagineItAll]

This is nothing short of brilliant. The ended was unexpected, but completely amazing. Another awesome job!

[Enigma]

Wow. Amazing.