Ballad Of Jane Doe

Inspired by a friends poem called 'Ode to Kali'

She washed herself with vinegar…..

to wash away the strain

to wash away the pain

to wash away the loneliness

to wash away the emptiness

 

 

The devil held out a warm hand…..

she lusted after lechery

she lusted after treachery

she lusted after bitterness

she lusted after abusiveness

 

 

On her deathbed, the devil laughed and deserted her

All alone she lay, wires sticking out of her

Angels descended from heaven, said “For heaven’s sake let your pride go!”

She saw the light and accepted God…..Doctors pronounced the death of Jane Doe.

Author's Note

I think people turn out the way they do sometimes simply because they are a victim of circumstance. Hopefully someday even if its at last moments they get redeemed on some level!

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was so amazing. I really love this. The emotions within this piece were really well portrayed. I can feel the pain, emptiness, loneliness, and strain that she is feeling. I could feel her death as well. I love the imagery to this as well. Good job. Thanks for sharing. :)

[EMF]

Wonderfully depressive, and teh language used cleverly, but each time I've read it I can't help thinking that I'm reading the lyrics of a song. There is nothing wrong in that, far from it. This poem would be real interesting if set to music.

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quite the wonderful but interesting read.
I really enjoyed this.

[Judas Hammer]

standing ovation. impressed. I love this line. She saw the light and accepted God…..Doctors pronounced the death of Jane Doe.

[dutch2lips]

interesting, good write

[brianna vega]

i like it

[Helpless]

interesting title, and very good write!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

You give us all hope that at the last moment there is still hope. Well penned

[Bailey C. Writing]

This is...breathtaking in a way o.o I really do like it...it sounds like a song that I would like to listen to

[Candy]

It's beautiful!! I like the feeling you get while she's dying!! Lovely, keep it on!