Beautiful Being

Really rough draft. I plan on editing and adding more

It is beautiful. So amazing how the tears flow from your eyes. The way you grasp the pillows as if they had done the deed. In your great terror of loneliness.
It is so lovely. When you you have lost your pride. As if allowing your heart to grow bitter and dead. The suffering is a symphony.
How incredible you are. To be so hollow and lifeless. Grown out of your childish ways. And come back to this reality. The sweet dream is over.
And isn't it so gorgeous how the light hits your lifeless face. The face of a a soul without cause. So mesmerizing it is....
to only be human.

Reviews

[Jade]

Thank you guys :] I feel the most beautiful poems are the saddest ones.

[hardik]

I bow down to thee, O great poetess. Your poem has emotion imagination and everything. Fantastic job :-)

[Wolfwind]

Rough draft or not, I think it really depicts a powerful vision. Each line is like an onion in reverse and you build the layers of the poem, until the end hits and we see the overall picture. Really awesome idea!

Great Ink!
Aaron =)