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A kind face

A soothing voice

A calming presence

Like a breath of wind across a lake

 

Hides a dark mind

Thoughts in turmoil

Emotions raging

Like seething lava, roiling beneath a calm surface

 

Confusion turns to anger

Revenge surges up

Thoughts turn to madness

Like a dark pheonix rising from ashes of light

 

Pleasantry covers a twisted mind

Like a jewelled box containing poison

Innocence covers deceit

Like silk flowing over lies

 

 

 

Author's Note

About someone going mad through single-minded desire for revenge. I'll leave you to wonder why...

Reviews

[Mioki]

The first stanza, which creates a calming attitude about the 'person', is a good setup because of how the second stanza reveals a whole different scene of feelings. It transforms from beauty to tragedy, and it's a very nice contrast. The third and fourth stanzas are also very descriptive. They explain how it would be like for a person losing their sanity, for the sake of letting themselves being consumed by revenge. The entire description of it deserves much applaud. It was very well written, and show's much skill. Good job on this poem, and I hope you continue to write more.

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

We all have our cross to bare and nobody is perfect as we exist in an imperfect world,i for one would agree with all of your sentiments here, you pretty much have described the human race and all of it's floors, i would describe myself as an angry soul, frustrated by the lack of standards,discipline,sloppy lazy actions of others and inconsiderate moronic behaviour.

Your first poem is so refreshing and calming but like a storm ready to brew up one knows good things don't happen over night and one has to try to keep a lid on the badness which lurks around every corner.

[Orlando Murcia]

I have been there
so I definitely feel your
mind with this

Great write!!

Orlando M

[Sseoni]

Wow! What an amazing poem! The way you worded everything was amazing. Calm to anger, revenge... wonderful poem. Great use and variety of words. I really enjoyed reading your poem! You did a fantastic job! :D

[Jessica]

wow this was really good i think it was the similies that really made it a great poem! good job! i loved it!

[Brittany]

Whoa :) REALLY GOOD. I love all of the similes and comparisons so you really get what your trying to convey. Well, as much as you CAN "get."

[incarnated deception]

caught my eye with this one poppy deffinately a mix of emotions you must have alot inside your head right now its verry intrigueing how youre mind works so well have to talk about this

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow pretty dramatic and provoking.. nice flow of rhythm.. and I can feel a real mix of emotions displayed here.. innocence covering a poison. All people contain a dark side .. this one paints a picture of this so precise. Written by someone going mad with single-minded desire for revenge... doesn't state if the writer is the one taking revenge or at the hands of it. Sometimes the innocent facade is twisted .. but then sometimes it is truly innocent.. this leaves the reader with many directions of thought. Liked the passionate energy surging.. a truly gripping mystery! =)