A Shot of Asprin

This I won't say anything about the pretext. I think it is very explainatory, I hope you like it.

"Death tolls are sky rocketing. Is it from a homicide or suicides?
 No one knows. 
Conflicts between loved ones, the bars are filling up..........."
      Take a shot,
And another,
      The pain is eased,
I cannot dance,
      I cannot move,
The hole is getting bigger,
     I need a stronger pain killer,
One arm around my body,
      It's cold and sterile,
All warmth gone out of reach,
     Holding myself together,
Let Aspirin and Vodka,
      Be the cure, Please

©Sonya Elizabeth B.
August 20, 2008

Author's Note

Intrepretations are welcomed.
Do you think this would be better/benifit as a diffrent type of writing?
How Can I improve this peice?
What other comments, questions, or critques do you have?
Thank you for your time.

Reviews

[L.G. Knight]

I think it could be expanded apon. I was just getting into feeling what was being said then BAM! it's done. Others may not feel this way and if they don't then great but I wanted more. Also I kind of wanted to know what personal pain the character is trying to rid themself of. Even some hint of it because I know it's not just the world that has them in so much pain. Give me some hints atleast to what it really is. It's got amazing potential to be a great poem that draws you in but right now it just leaves me wanting. I don't t mean to sound mean or too critical I really just want to help so I hope this does. Great beginning. =)
Frances