Faceless People

A little bit of a rant

The world is full of faceless people Tolerance consumes them Lies warm those  Who blindly follow Like sheep led to slaughter. One fad comes Another disappears An idea is proposed Millions change their views overnight Their ideas Not really theirs Blind to reality Deaf to the truth They live only in their own coffins Awaiting decent In to the cold, unfeeling ground The reality they created.

There is so much more! If only they had eyes to see The sun cast its glory down The oceans crash in to one another The mountains try to reach the heavens To peer in to the cosmos Even for a second. If they had ears to hear The birds melodious song The wind whisper through the trees To hear a newborn babe give it’s voice For the first time. If only they could speak To stand up for what is right To speak words of truth and love To encourage and support They could sing praises.

Alas, people have no faces For if they did, they would know There is something much greater than this world Much greater than themselves A truth they would know deep down A love they could not contain Or even comprehend. The people with no faces Just keep walking in to walls Knowing no different Until one day They simple vanish And no one even notices.

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Please give suggestions for making it better/smoother

Reviews

[Alex Vidmar]

I really like this, too. However, the line, "Lies keep them warm/Blindly following" could also become something like, "Lies warm those who blindly follow." You should also, in my opinion, remove the word "And" from "And millions change their views overnight". The line immediately following could also be re-written to something more along the lines of, "Their ideas, not really theirs." "Waiting to descend" can also sound a little better, maybe rewording it to something like, "Awaiting descent."

Again, I am only giving you suggestions, and you don't have to use them. But this was great in the way that you describe what so many try to ignore in such a profound way.

Keep writing! I really want to read more of your pieces!

Peace.

[The Hampstead Poet]

A poem so full of emotion, of pain, it has no form, but like a scream, expresses a deep truth in a pure, raw way. I share your pain in that, there are so many people in the world, and so few are remembered or make a difference in the world. Things in this world are ephemeral, fleeting, and this poem captures it really well.

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

(Review for Change the World Comp)

For the first time.
If only they could speak
To stand up for what is right
To speak words of truth and love
To encourage and support
They could sing praises.

The above lines explain why I write and why I encourage others to write. Simply by you have the courage to place your emotions out in the world you are making a change. These words will effect someone, somewhere. If more of humanity shared their truths we woudl all help each other and millions would change overnight. It is clear from the two works I have read of yours that you have a power that will eventually expload to chart new unexplored aspects of your subject above. Great stuff, keep it comming.

[rnuff]

i enjoyed this write the way it is, says alot about some people.

[Charles]

I really like this. Some of the notions you touch upon are familiar themes for me. It's not a criticism, but you could work to make your point with more abstract tones. Of course a face has no mouth, but that doesn't always mean it can't communicate. Again, I really enjoyed this piece.