Life, Love, Then Death

First she lived, then she loved, then she said good-bye...

What would you do

If you saw the real me?

Am I really the person

I always thought that I would be?

Deception seeping from my skin,

My mouth laden with lies,

My soul has always been,

A master of disguise.

Each breath I take is treachery,

For I hide my true self,

Afraid that if you find me,

You'll toss me on the shelf.

A miserable person am I,

Who conceals myself in shame,

I wish I could be angry,

And cast you all the blame.

Truth is it's my fault,

My sins, my guilt, my lies,

For this I say I'm sorry

And will write you my good-byes.

Good-bye my only love,

I wish you only knew,

How much you meant to me,

And how completely I loved you.

The way your hair blew softly

And your eyes shone in the night

Your hands so warm and safe

Your soul so pure and bright.

I never knew your touch,

You didn't care to see,

My need for you so great,

My one last dying plea.

Good-bye my love, farewell

May sweet dreams get you through,

My heart may stop this night,

But I will always love only you.

Author's Note

Input appreciated. I don't usually do the rhyming thing but it kind of just popped in to my head and I ran with it. Also, the picture will probably change.

Reviews

[Twilight]

This poem does have a genuine poetic structure, often rhymes and each verse follows a traditional form. Interestingly, the meanings and metaphors are not all immediately apparent (even to an experience writer like myself). However, that is not a weakness in the hands of a talented writer (as in this case). She clearly has her own understandings and meanings for certain terms - which she has expressed concisely and from the heart! Either way, many of the overall meanings are clear and reveal that this poet knows how to express some of her deepest feelings and concerns. Thank you, for sharing this with us!

[Rendawg]

hey youve entered a poem in my contest depressing/dark romance

and i just to say i love that poem Life, Love, Then death it is prob one of bes things ive read so far i enjoyed reading every word from it you have grea potintial,a way of words,and you put it together s beutifully it was as if watching a movie.

you were the first person ive ever confronted about such a amazing poem

it has been an honor reading your poem and i just had to tell you how much i loved it thanks for giving me the oppertunity to read it THANK YOU!!! =D!!!!

[Dream Weaver]

You did the rhyming thing fairly well.
As for the write, sadly an emotional
poetic fitting of ones last goodbye..
Nicely done...

[HopelesslyDevoted]

a lot of rhyming poems can often turn out corny or just boring or held back because the writer is not able to say what they mean. but you over came that, i like this one a lot. this is an excellent piece of writing.