Living in Today

addressing destructive thinking

 

The morning dawns, the sun rises and yet,

The night is all I see screaming at my eyes.

The choice is mine; I’m an eagle I will fly.

The truth of choice sings, her song is free.

 

I eat that which feeds the day, I choose and yet,

I still hear the night, notes screaming in my eyes.

I will work for my freedom, renewed I will fly,

I hear dawns rising flames, new birth, I am free

Reviews

[Viper]

I liked this one.It had a vivid imagery to it.It's like I could see it happening in front of me.Nicely done.

[Alice Oiseau]

Love that last line!
Very beautifully written with a strong structure and strong images to accompany it.

Cheers.

[Jon Lattone]

I really really love those first two lines. You got especially got my attention with "the night is all I see screaming at my eyes" THAT is poetry :)
Keep that mind of yours goin :D
I am now your fan :P

[Ohmy indies]

Wow! I really liked this. It was really powerful and full of so much emotion.

"I hear dawns rising flames, new birth, I am free"

That was probably my favorite line in the entire poem. It was really beautiful. Great job with this!


-Ohmy indies

[Shadow Writer]

You touch on many different emotions in this piece. Well done. Phantom...............

[Jibey]

Powerful and painful but with a glimmer of hope