This is a fun a powerful read that speaks true to many writers (heck, I'll even say all, since it is indeed safe to say all are represented in this poem). My only constructive criticism is that your musicality doesn't flow quite well, particularly around stanza 4, and then it comes back for a bit only to be lost again. I can't tell whether it was because of the want to rhyme well or simply from lack of other ways to word the line, but at times it gets a tad wordy, and rhymes are not hitting with the bang they often have, and the musicality more importantly is flowing with a clunky pace of sorts. If you read it aloud to yourself, you'll be able to detect where the lines can be pruned to help the musicality. Well done otherwise. Love the message.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for the constructive criticism! Much appreciate!
This is a fun a powerful read that speaks true to many writers (heck, I'll even say all, since it is indeed safe to say all are represented in this poem). My only constructive criticism is that your musicality doesn't flow quite well, particularly around stanza 4, and then it comes back for a bit only to be lost again. I can't tell whether it was because of the want to rhyme well or simply from lack of other ways to word the line, but at times it gets a tad wordy, and rhymes are not hitting with the bang they often have, and the musicality more importantly is flowing with a clunky pace of sorts. If you read it aloud to yourself, you'll be able to detect where the lines can be pruned to help the musicality. Well done otherwise. Love the message.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you for the constructive criticism! Much appreciate!
that is why...u r my favourite...I truely love ur concepts...keep writing...
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7 Years Ago
Aww thank you do much! Though it has been long since I haven't posted anything :p
Will defin.. read moreAww thank you do much! Though it has been long since I haven't posted anything :p
Will definitely try to put more
"You may talk about their dark circles
But those eyes have something else to say" i love this so much
This was such a well written poem
Structure wise content wise
Perfect love it
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you soooo much! :)
Your feedback means so much to me :)
i think u have paid the tribute to all your fellow-writers by writing this one... so truthful...i really liked the flow and rhythm throughout the poem...amazing work done...
This is an unusual message! I'm kinda scared! *wink! wink!* No I agree with so many of these observations, the dark secrets of our trade. I like your rhyming thru-out & the original-sounding attributes, despite finding things that are oh-so-familiar, too. There's a playfulness here, despite your threat at the end! *smile*
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7 Years Ago
Hahah! Thank you very much for the sweet words! After all, only a writer can understand another wri.. read moreHahah! Thank you very much for the sweet words! After all, only a writer can understand another writer ;)
Amazing one! You've got some very good lines in your poem. I just love your writing style, and yeah, we should never judge writers. Thank you for sharing. It's always a pleasure to read your works :)
Ahh well, since I am a reader I can judge a writer lol jk :p
This was cool. I totally agree, writing isn't everyone's cup of tea. Some really great lines in this piece.
Nicely penned, Sonakshi. I enjoyed reading this :)
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7 Years Ago
Thank you very much for pointing out the typo
I'm glad you liked it :)
7 Years Ago
you're welcome. Always a pleasure reading good works :)
Hahaha...... Such an amazing and incredible poem! And what you wrote above in the poem is like the truest thing I've ever read or listened. This piece of art shows how talented you are, and this one is for all the haters to tell them that don't judge her, she's a writer.
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7 Years Ago
Haha yep! Only writers can judge writers ;)
Thank you for the kind and encouraging words Anja.. read moreHaha yep! Only writers can judge writers ;)
Thank you for the kind and encouraging words Anjali!
This is going to be a bit long but I swear it is funny please read it don't go....
Hello fellow writers! I once wrote a poem which somehow got selected for my school magazine. Then I wrote a poem w.. more..