Brotherly Ties

A piece I wrote after my elder brother left for college.

You know what is worst than lies?
A lost brother and broken ties.
He was the one who stole my heart,
And things are now falling apart.
You know you're doing things just for the sake,
When your tears are real but your smile is fake.
And now that you have gone, darkness is all I see,
So, here is a song for you and me.
Oh I know! Oh I know,
You need to fly and learn to grow.
And now that I shall set you free,
Promise me , you'll reserve a place in your heart, for me.

Author's Note

Constructive criticism is always appreciated!

Reviews

[KT-B]

Wow this poem is so apt to how I feel right now. I have just said goodbye to my brother who is going abroad for 6 months, maybe a year, he has been my rock in difficult times and I'm lost without him already :( - thank you for putting into words my exact sentiments - well done :)

[Sonakshi Arora]

Thank you so much :)
Best wishes to him : D

[Dave]

Being the oldest has its advantages. I was fortunate that I was. Not until I came home for a break did I realize the affection my brothers and sister felt for me.

[Sonakshi Arora]

:D. Siblings love each other. It is just that we don't prefer to show :p