Betrayed.

You loved me once,

a long time ago,

you held my hand,

said you'd never let go,

the touch of your lips,

againts my mouth,

made me shiver,

made me melt.

My heart was whole, 

you made me realize,

that love was amazing,

so full of surprises.

But then today,

you came to my door,

you handed me a box,

and I asked "what's this for?"

you told me it was over,

you couldn't go on,

for you have a secret,

that was deeply wrong.

With tears in my eyes,

my box in my hands,

you told me about her,

told me why it had to end.

You said for 2 years,

and we've been together four,

then I told you to get lost

as I slammed the door.

Half my relationship

was wasted with him,

I was an idiot, how could I not realize?

how was the truth so deeply hidden?

Her lips had been on his,

her body had been with him,

I thought I was the only one

but I guess I was mistaken,

My heart is melting,

like ice on a winter day,

I watched as you left,

I feel so cheated and betrayed.

Author's Note

This isn't my best. Tell me what ya think? XD

Reviews

[steph]

If this is'nt your best, then I will be totally blown away by your best.... If this was a halfhearted effort I could'nt tell, this poem brought me to tears as I felt her heart break... I was sorrowed that her boyfriend did'nt care enough, and that he would just cheat on her like that... your talent, you don't give yourself credit for, which is something, that may hinder you later. none of us feels our poems are good.... In fact, I never thought mine were anything but words on paper that expresses the thought and dreams. Its deeper than that, a poem is a window to the soul, and you have a great soul indeed! Don't be hard on yourself, this poem is perfect!

[Rose]

i can sonnect with this poem so much. i cannot wait to see what else you come up with. fabulous job!

[Samantha (:]

I really like it. If you think this isn't the best then you're crazy! It has great rhythm, and everyone can relate to it. Good write. (:

[New Beginnings]

Love gone wrong by betrayal of someone you love and trusted unfortunately happens more than we would like. Like your description of "her" being with him. It certainly is a thought that crosses one's mind when processing the hurt felt.

[Midnight_Mystery]

It's another great poem. Not your best? pfft..then your best is awesomeeee. because this was great :)

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

When I read about cheaters and liars I get fired up a tad, lol. It just means you did a great job at selling me the story!

[Heather D]

Beautiful write. I know this feeling so well and you portray it will such powerful emotion.

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

Great emotion!

[Karli]

So deep and true. This IS one of your best, also. Very raw emotion displayed here.

[Steven Cetta]

Wow. I can understand the pain and the let down. I've been through my own sort of situation. I loved it.