Ghost of a suicidal atheist

Traditional knowledge eludes you.
Harboring woe, as a jealous jewel;
Entrenched in greed,
though it keeps you among us,
you're no longer with us.

As Christ walked water, so do you;
taking each bemoaning step,
the surface rippling from your actions.
Viewing in hopelessness, the transparently teaming life below you,
praying something will drag you under.

That eternal environment consumes your logic,
standing at the brim where emotions meet thought.
Don't tug at those thread ridden wrists,
you will fight the answers that seep out.

Where are you?
Why are you here?
Who are you?

Laying upon sheets of ruby red.
Malefic actions.
Jane - Your dead.

Reviews

[saratogaparty]

Damn, that last line is like the gunshot that killed her!
Great write!

It should be "you're" instead of your for that line, though, hope that helps!

[oceanatears]

I'm impressed! This is interesting and well sorted out. I especially liked, "don't tug at those thread ridden wrists, you will fight the answers that seep out."

[Somebrownnerd]

Thank you, for the review. I' am glad you liked those particular lines!

[Frieda P]

Suicide poetry is always a downer, this is interesting since you could be talking about any topic really, i read it as truth is Jane. That's where my head went, I'm sure your intentions were quite different, but it's out of your hands now, and in my head. It's unusual and suspect, that must be why I like it.

[Somebrownnerd]

Thank you for reading Frieda. It can definitely be interpreted in many ways. I was wanting to focus on the regret of the women who committed suicide; It is bit of a downer.

[Frieda P]

I lost my sister to suicide, possibly the reason I found a way around the interpretation. It was still a good read. My pleasure.

[Chris]

Dark and well sorted out... with a building content. I liked the last line.

[Somebrownnerd]

Thank you Chris, its nice have you drop in again. Again thank you for the read.

[KAOlmsted]

I'm impressed ;-) Just wanted to drop in and have a browse...I like what I see. Thanks for sharing your work with us.

[Somebrownnerd]

Thanks for dropping by! I'm glad you enjoyed my little page.

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure. I'll be sure to drop by more often.