Looking Out

A little write.

As one rose blooms,

Another withers away.

Light replaces that of darkness,

And as life goes on,

Death pursues.

 

Yin and yang couldn't be more lucid,

But like a transparent glass window,

It can also be fogged, blurring the vision.

Making it even more perplexing ,

Than initially intended.

 

Searching for an answer,

I wipe the fogged up window,

But the more I try to clear it,

The cloudier it got.

Like a Chinese finger trap.

 

Deluded and afraid,

I take a step back from the window.

Ensnared by the illusion,

I attempt to break it,

By pounding the frame.

 

Trapped within my own state of mind,

I take a step back from the panes.

Taking a step back I see a larger portrait,

A mirror that reflected not only me,

But what lied ahead.

 

Transfixed by my own reflected,

Smudged with the me of tomorrow,

I close my eyes in hopes of regaining foot.

Opening them I find myself outside,

Looking at another me within a small house,

Trying to wipe the fogged window clear.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[HeavenSunArcadez]

Great material Soma, I like how your words flowed together on this... as well as your well constructed lines which helped to bring out the life in your write... definitely loved these two

Searching for an answer,
I wipe the fogged up window,
But the more I try to clear it,
The cloudier it got.
Like a Chinese finger trap.

(clever description with the chinese finger trap) admire that a lot.

and this first stanza

As one rose blooms,
Another withers away.
Light replaces that of darkness,
And as life goes on,
Death pursues.

(well coordinated lines of truth and life) very well written..impressive work

Id say u did a fantastic job on this piece, and definitely has replay value...

now know u want to hear what i got from this... and gladly will explain.. We has humans have a tendency to sometimes be close minded in how we see life, and how we view nature and the all aspiring world around us... but narrow minded thinking only goes so far, and one person once stated (a straight line is not always the fastest way) In this case, when we limit ourselves after something has effected us emotionally or mentally... we soon tend to believe that this dimensional state is a personal trap/yet our conscience tells us to believe that... when in reality sometimes a clearer image is caught just by a vista ... a distant view.. after all some of the greatest monuments are seen from a distance like the Nazca lines... but I see internal pain as being surrounded by heat... when in it your in grave danger and relief would only come from distancing yourself....

sorry i wrote so much Man, good stuff!

[Soma-ko]

Hahaha, on the contrary my friend, I'm glad you had some much to write on my piece!What you say holds truth, and sometimes we have to zig zag to get to our destination quicker than going head first, and sometimes we can only characterize our behavior as a contradiction. Thank you, and I'm glad you read it. :)

[NA]

Very thought provoking Soma...superbly penned piece :) x

[Soma-ko]

Why thank you Raven. :)

[SyberRose]

Nicely penned Soma...enjoyed the significance of this piece...a manifestation of emotions
can make one unclear and foggy in thought...Rose

[Soma-ko]

Thank you, and thanks for wandering by. :)

[wordman]

you are so right on this one
well written

[Soma-ko]

Thank you, and thanks for the review.