The Wanderer

Nothing too in depth, just something I thought up after reading 'The Breeze of River Road', by Syberrose.

A mile within a mile

Was locked within his smile.

A shadow within a shadow

Was what hid him in his meadow.

 

A flower within a flower,

Was something he waited for to bloom.

A meaning within a meaning,

Was what he wanted to construe.

 

He felt lost because he was lost,

Something he left along the path.

He felt sad because he was sad,

Something he cherished was left in wrath.

 

The boy looked up because he could look,

And saw nothing but the sky.

Something so dark because it was dark,

And that was because it was night.

Author's Note

Lost within a dream was he, or was it reality, something he couldn't see... Well this thought is a poem within itself, going to see if this leads anywhere.

Reviews

[Me]

Again love what you've done here...excellent! :) x

[Soma-ko]

Thank you. :)

[Another Poet]

I really adore your poem. It was amazing. I like sad/dark poems.

[Soma-ko]

Thank you, and just to let you know, I have a few other poems that are sad/dark. I too enjoy reading and writing about darkness, and my favorite genre is horror. (my friend Raven Rees has a lot of poems on darkness in general).

[Another Poet]

Okay that is cool!

[OBWhiteHawk]

This is really cool, love the repetition of words it is almost soothing in effect.

[Soma-ko]

Thank you, it sounded very nice in my head, so I thought I would try it out.

[OBWhiteHawk]

It sounds great and reads great too. I tend to read poems outloud, and this one flows beautifully.

[Danielle]

Beautifully written & lovely rhyme scheme.
Great job!

[Soma-ko]

Why thank you.

[NA]

I don't always know what to say when I review others work, I don't always have the words...I just know that I liked this a lot :)

[Soma-ko]

Hahaha, that exact problem plagues me every time I read a really good poem, and have no words for it. I want to review it, saying how much I enjoy the piece, but I feel like "I enjoyed your poem" isn't good enough for a review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, even though you're not sure why. :)

[NA]

lol...yes I wish I was more articulate

[SyberRose]

Wow that was great Soma...I cant believe you wrote it so fast after just reading mine ha...
I love it and the form too and the photo...nicely done my friend...Rose

[Soma-ko]

Honestly, I have no idea how this came up while reading your poem, since it isn't even that relevant. I didn't know what to write for a review on your poem because romance poems just stick with me, and I have no words for them (in a good way), but I felt I had to write something in turn after reading it. I so glad you liked it.

[Soma-ko]

*I'm

[SyberRose]

yes I do like it...one of my favorites by you.