Grandfather Clock

Time goes on regardless...

A clear marble

Strikes the face of a grandfather clock.

The pendulum oscillates, left and right.

Time passes by, tick tock.

 

A wrinkle appears on the grandfather’s face,

And a tear rolls off his cheek.

His heart beats, thump thump.

Times goes on, tick tock.

 

The crack on the clock spreads,

Covering the entire face.

The pendulum swings, right and left.

Times proceeds, tick tock.

 

The wizened grandfather’s face stares at the sky,

A smile creeps unto his face.

His heart continues to beat, thump.

Times slows down, tick.

 

The clock’s face shatters,

Shards of glass touch the ground.

The pendulum stops.

Time keeps moving.

 

The grandfather’s hand goes limp,

Eyes staring at blank space.

His heart stops.

Time strolls along.

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a wonderful metaphorical piece - the slowing of a life, the stopping of Time - and its continuation, regardless... Really liked this imagery: "A wrinkle appears on the grandfather’s face, And a tear rolls off his cheek..." Great piece!

[Soma-ko]

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed my piece. A bonus if you didn't realize: the single tear that rolled of his eye, was the clear marble from the first line.

[NA]

Time waits for no man...you have a wonderful imagination...I really enjoyed this one :)

[Soma-ko]

Time is a mystical thing, yet so real. Thank you for the compliment, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is a powerful write. I like the larger metaphor at work here...the idea of the grandfather clock, father time and the fact that even in death, time keeps moving. There is an inevitability to this piece that is slightly unsettling, in a good way; meaning that you struck a chord with me emotionally. I like all of the clock imagery.

[Soma-ko]

Thanks, I'm glad you like my poem, and found something that you could connect to. Its the fact that time is inevitable, that people take it for granted, and ignore it, letting the present pass by without a second thought, and regretting it when its too late.

Thanks for the review Sarah.

[SyberRose]

Very unique indeed Soma...enjoyed your words...a creative piece...I liked the tick tock at the end of some of the stanza's ..and then the just the tick...Rose

[Soma-ko]

Thanks, if you've noticed, the clock and the person are actually two different things, but connected at the same time. The pendulum and his heart, with the 'ticking' and his pulse to be connected as well.

Thanks for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[SyberRose]

your welcome Soma

[SyberRose]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/AshleyMarieStarr/1175596/

you might want to review this as I met ashley today and she asked to read it.
I thought you might want to read it.

[Soma-ko]

Note taken, I'll make my way there.

[SyberRose]

thanks

[Soma-ko]

I will admit that I enjoyed her piece, but to clarify things for the future: I enjoy horror as in zombie, supernatural, monsters devouring/ dismantling humans in a gory fashion, not a big fan of knifes slicing up people's skin, or torture tools. Just letting you know.

[SyberRose]

oh okay...thanks for reading though...didnt know if it was your thing or not.

[Soma-ko]

Hahaha, I don't think that teen suicide falls under the category of 'horror'.

[SyberRose]

im not really into horror either haa