Faunication

Playing with words, flora, fauna and a faun

Ebonic clay is cumbersome
Says the faun that flees the night
Free me of my wicked ways
Paraded beneath the soft moonlight
As shadows lurk within these walls
Of the forest, twilight hues
Are deft to catch me none may fall
To the rhythm of disenchanted blues
I wish for sanctity, for my release
From the prisms of non regard
Chisel your schisms upon the breeze
Of hooves the fauna made hard
For soft feet of the flora pain
A faun in fear of capture
Yet yearning to know how learning does grow
One stronger, leaner, faster

Reviews

[Chris]

A fine rhythm and flow...I like the tones.

[ZeniaK]

I feel as though there's a particular essence of magic in this poem and I love it! The imagery is beautiful, and I thought it was great.

[AYVID N]

I loved this poetry for it's flow, it's lovely imagery and sheer essence of nature's beauty. Applause!

[Solilokiss]

Thank you for the kind review, Divya. Happy holidays! :)

[one sky]

Wow! Love how you used alliteration and assonance in this piece. Good job, Sol.

[Solilokiss]

Thank you so much, Misty for your visit and awesome review! :)

[one sky]

You're welcome, Sol.

[Ken Simm.]

Now this I like. It flows like an erudite river through myth and legend.

[Solilokiss]

Thank you, Ken. Your feedback is appreciated! :)

[Donald]

It just sings off the page.

[Solilokiss]

Thank you :)

[Echoes of Eros]

You do know how to make words dance and sing in this most delicious forest, deep in the longing for freedom. Fly, faster and higher forever. xo

[Solilokiss]

Hi Echoes, thank you for your very kind review upon this penning. It is appreciated! :)

[Archangel Gabriel]

You have such eloquence. You are obvously an educated poet and I must admit that Ebonics threw me. Your poetry flows so smoothly and evokes such beautiful imagry!

[Solilokiss]

Thank you, AG. Your feedback is appreciated. Ebonic clay (in my eyes) is darkened flesh, the mortal coil.

[Archangel Gabriel]

Ebonic is African American Vernacular English.

[Solilokiss]

Oh... See I just write what I hear. Perhaps I used the wrong word?

[Archangel Gabriel]

No in art you are allowed to create!

[Solilokiss]

Happy to accept suggestions though! Helps me to learn and grow and better the art of word play.