Galleon

A lil' poem I wrote about a "boss" in an online game, as a tribute to how he helped me out. The poem follows the actual chain of in-game events for that time.

Once there was a creature

Found within a game

Huge, hideous and harmless

Galleon was his name

He wasn't very smart

But he was my friend

And we'd stick together

Until the end

In a ring of mammoths

I fought a bear

It was relentless

It had no fear

I cried for help

And what did I hear

A distant yelp

He was coming here

Despite being outnumbered

And had no chance at all

Galleon approached

Answering to my call

The bears heart

Had it's final beat

As it was crushed

Under Galleons feet

But Galleon my friend,

You're a loyal fool

You put yourself exposed

Surrounded by wool

One beautiful beast

One shrill cry

One life ceased

One last goodbye

And hurr durr he died end of story

Author's Note

The storyline is concrete and wont give into changing, as the poem is written upon a chain of actual events. It's not really the most... serious poems of mine. But I like it.

Reviews

[Sargon Dorsai]

It's an interesting poem, I'll give you that. The story is amusing. The rhythm of the poem is hard to handle though. You change out your timing within the same stanzas, let along from stanza to stanza.

One of the things you should do while you're writing poem is read it outloud. If you have to pause on multiple occasions to figure out how you're going to say something, it means you might need to work on the wording for that particular line.

Otherwise, I found this poem highly entertaining and would have loved to see what scene in the game led up to it.

Thank you for sharing.