Friendship

Friendship

A Poem by Sofia
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Just a short poem on friendship..

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An imperishable and unbreakable bond we share,
All the troubles together we bear
When one's hurt the others care,
So strong our bond is that none can tear,

Yes my friend, that's the FRIENDSHIP we share.

© 2017 Sofia


Author's Note

Sofia
A really short poem..i wrote it while completing my school project on friendship.. Please feel free to criticize...I would love to improve on my writing skills..

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Thi is wonderful, Sofia! Loved your creativity and word selection!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Aw, that's sweet. Most have back stabbers in the name of friends. You're a lucky lass. Wonderful words!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Sofia

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much! Yeah, I'm so lucky to have my besties. Thanx for your appreciation :)
Zoya

6 Years Ago

No problem :)
lovely words . short poem but cute one

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sofia

7 Years Ago

Haha! Thank you for your lovely visit... I'm glad you stopped by...
Loving, innocent and beautiful little poem. How it touched my heart! Eloquent words with good flow and rhyme. You are very talented poet Sofia. Keep writing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sofia

7 Years Ago

I'm really grateful to you ma'am for your wonderful review which encouraged me a lot...thank you :)
Annette Pisano-Higley

7 Years Ago

You're so welcome! Keep writing dear!
A wonderful little poetic clip, and a noble sentiment of friendly affection. I enjoyed it.

If you'd like constructive criticism (and I'm by no means any kind of expert), I'd suggest slightly greater care to meter: even with an open style, I find that rhyming syllables helps keep to a beat, which can support pacing, especially important for spoken poetry. However, being such a short poem, that's not as important here. Alliteration and interior rhyme can also enhance memorability, but to me they're purely gravy. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sofia

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your kind visit and review. I'm glad you enjoyed. At first, even I thought o.. read more
This is a nice poem that moves the heart with its brevity. Two notes, if I may: Lines 1 and 4 essentially repeat the same idea (which in a poem so brief is not so advisable), and in Line 1 you're missing an article (an "an" at the beginning) or a plural ("bondS") for that line to make sense. Otherwise this is well written with a strong message and good musicality. Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sofia

7 Years Ago

Thank you for ur kind visit and review. I will surely try my best to avoid these mistakes in future .. read more
Poetry's not my strongsuit, but I like the simplicity of a poem about a subject that's more overlooked than it should be.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sofia

7 Years Ago

Thank you for checking out this poem...grateful to you for giving it a read :)
Your choice of words are great:)
And I loved your rhyme.
You are a great poet:)
Always happy for you lil' sis:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sofia

7 Years Ago

Aww!! Love u sis.. you're so cute...thank you very much siso :)
Hope

7 Years Ago

My pleasure always:)
aw i love this. it's so simple and brings a warning piece when read, i love it :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


rowan.taylorrr

7 Years Ago

i meant warming not warning lol
rowan.taylorrr

7 Years Ago

and peace not piece
Sofia

7 Years Ago

Yeah, I know you meant that...no problem☺
A great poem on friendship, Sofia.....though few in lines, yet enough to explain the meaning of friendship...how lovely your poem is...keep it up, dear.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sofia

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much!!😊 Nd thank you for making me really happy😊
Priyanshi

7 Years Ago

Always a pleasure...dear

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Added on June 1, 2017
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Kolkata, West Bengal, India



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