Spring

Spring marks a new beginning and a fresh start for us...

The chilling winter breeze is down
As spring marks its arrival
The beauty of the countryside increases as though,
It were a covert with a lovely hue
The flowers bloom all the way long
The vehicles ply making noise - 'ting tong'
Here comes, buzzing a little bee
Searching for nectar and its home to be
The enthralling atmosphere spreads the message of peace,
As if the place were God's own masterpiece
But Beware, the lovely season brings with it
Diseases such as chickenpox and measles
And soon the warm season prevails,
And because of the heat, people wail
As spring bids adieu to come next year
And summer makes the people to fear.

Author's Note

Pheww!! Posted at last..This is the very first poem of a 12 year old😅 Please feel free to criticize. I wrote this poem long ago in spring but I was to nervous to post it. Do tell me how it is.

Reviews

[Riddhi]

Oh!Its actually nice according to a 12year old and that too first time..My first writing was actually so bad that i still feel nervous to post it here!!! I liked the way you wrote about spring and especially your rhyming words were perfect...
I just wished if it would have you know some more pleasant memories of spring and then you know bad things of summer that will just transport the writer from you know some pleasant things to scorching heat of summer..It would have been more interesting...
But overall this was really nice and you know for a first timer its actually the best you can do first time and that too at the age of 12!!!
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
Take care
Riddhi

[Sofia]

Wow! I super happy!! Thank you for ur kind visit...I didn't know that it was good...even I was nervous​ to post this here.. I'm sure ur first poetry was very good..come on..do post it..and yeah, I agree it would have been more interesting that way...but I kinda didn't know what lines to add :p... Take care..

[Sofia]

Forgot to add the "am" before super happy...

[Abraham George]

Oh!Its actually nice according to a 12year old
Riddhi i disagree with this. This poem is actually a good one even for a well experienced writer. so for a 12 year old this is awesome. i am sure that till now i didn't wrote a poem this much good

[Sofia]

Omg! Thanks so much for the compliment :) I'm so so so happy

[Nicole]

Spring is one of my favorite seasons, and living where I do, can sympathize with the people who wail because of the summer heat. I really entered into your poem with the bee. I just posted a poem myself that has a bee that plays a significant role as it pollinates roadside flowers. I noticed as your poem progressed, couplet rhyming started to appear. I wonder how the poem might change if you revised to add couplets throughout or revised to take them out entirely and make it more of a prose poem. I see some deep thoughts in the lines that a bit of revision would really help to make them pop. Keep writing!

[Sofia]

Sure! Spring is my favourite too. Thank you for your visit and encouraging review. I'll try my best to improve. I'll remember your suggestion next time :)

[writ rajat]

शीत�™ सर्दियों की हवा नीचे है
जैसा कि वसंत के आगमन का प्रतीक है
ग्रामीण इ�™ाकों की सुंदरता बढ़ जाती है,
यह एक प्यारा रंग के साथ एक गुप्त थे
फू�™ सभी तरह �™ंबे समय तक खि�™ते हैं
वाहनों के च�™ते शोर - 'टिंग टोंग'
यहाँ आता है, थोड़ा मधुमक्खी गूंज
अमृत ​​और उसके घर की खोज करना
उत्साही वातावरण शांति का संदेश फै�™ता है,
जैसे कि यह जगह भगवान की अपनी कृति थी
�™ेकिन खबरदार, सुंदर मौसम इसके साथ �™ाता है
कैंसर और खसरा जैसे रोग
और ज�™्द ही गर्म मौसम प्रच�™ित है,
और गर्मी के कारण, �™ोग आक्रोश करते हैं
अग�™े सा�™ आने के �™िए स्प्रिंग बिड्स ऐडीयू के रूप में
और गर्मियों में �™ोगों को डर �™गता है

[Sofia]

Wow! Is this a hindi version of my poem?

[writ rajat]

Yeah dear it is

[Sofia]

That's wonderful..thanks for sharing it..

[writ rajat]

Don't you know hindi

[Sofia]

Yeah, I know Hindi...but why??

[writ rajat]

You asked is it hindi

[Sofia]

Actually, I asked that whether it was my poem or not..

[writ rajat]

You wrote and you don't know how amazing

[Sofia]

Some words are wrong in the hindi version...for instance, in the diseases part, I never mentioned cancer, I mentioned abt chicken pox nd measles...thts why I asked

[writ rajat]

Ok ok chana chahta hu aap ki Kavita la zawab hai

[Sofia]

Thank you :)

[writ rajat]

aap kaise likhti hai

[Sofia]

Haath se...hahaha😂

[writ rajat]

Mujhe Laga keypad se

[Sofia]

Hahaha...pehle poem paper pe likhti hun.. uske baad type krti hun :D

[writ rajat]

Hum direct likhte no editing

[Sofia]

Hmm...okay

[Anoushka]

Wow! Amazing. You know? I have just turned 13 now. So,I guess we could be great friends right? Anyway,your poem was just fantastic! Loved the way you expressed it! Keep Writing!

[Sofia]

Wow! That's wonderful..having a friend from the same city on this site and more or less being of the same age is so amazing...yeah, we could be besties...thank you very much for ur cute review..

[Soumya Deouskar]

Wow! It's too good for a 12 year old! Keep writing,Sofia!

[Sofia]

Thank you very much for your kind review.. I'm glad you liked it :)

[Rassoul]

Wow, great poem for a 12 year old girl, amazing!

[Sofia]

Thank you so much!! I never expected people to like this poem...but I'm really glad since you all liked it..

[MAC]

what a lovely poem, truly enjoyed it. was something slightly different, which i am always lured to. excellent write!

[Sofia]

Thank you very much!! I'm honoured by this sweet review 😃

[Pravir]

Well if its your class 12th poem then i can say you have really in born talent. . . it was lovely. A simpl description of the climate change . . a very simple piece but yet effective to easily connect with the readers . . keep sharing

[Sofia]

Thank you so much!! Currently I'm in class 7....actually I said I'm 12 years old...once again thank you for appreciating this poem😊

[Pravir]

Sorry i over read that . ..hehe. . its great write from class 7 girl. . . keep sharing

[Sofia]

Thank you..that means a lot

[Anna]

I really love this poem! It's so thoughtful
It's really well written

[Sofia]

Thank you so much for appreciating it... I'm glad you liked it😊