Spring

Spring marks a new beginning and a fresh start for us...

The chilling winter breeze is down
As spring marks its arrival
The beauty of the countryside increases as though,
It were a covert with a lovely hue
The flowers bloom all the way long
The vehicles ply making noise - 'ting tong'
Here comes, buzzing a little bee
Searching for nectar and its home to be
The enthralling atmosphere spreads the message of peace,
As if the place were God's own masterpiece
But Beware, the lovely season brings with it
Diseases such as chickenpox and measles
And soon the warm season prevails,
And because of the heat, people wail
As spring bids adieu to come next year
And summer makes the people to fear.

Author's Note

Pheww!! Posted at last..This is the very first poem of a 12 year old😅 Please feel free to criticize. I wrote this poem long ago in spring but I was to nervous to post it. Do tell me how it is.

Reviews

[Riddhi]

Oh!Its actually nice according to a 12year old and that too first time..My first writing was actually so bad that i still feel nervous to post it here!!! I liked the way you wrote about spring and especially your rhyming words were perfect...
I just wished if it would have you know some more pleasant memories of spring and then you know bad things of summer that will just transport the writer from you know some pleasant things to scorching heat of summer..It would have been more interesting...
But overall this was really nice and you know for a first timer its actually the best you can do first time and that too at the age of 12!!!
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
Take care
Riddhi

[Sofia]

Wow! I super happy!! Thank you for ur kind visit...I didn't know that it was good...even I was nervous​ to post this here.. I'm sure ur first poetry was very good..come on..do post it..and yeah, I agree it would have been more interesting that way...but I kinda didn't know what lines to add :p... Take care..

[Sofia]

Forgot to add the "am" before super happy...

[Abraham George]

Oh!Its actually nice according to a 12year old
Riddhi i disagree with this. This poem is actually a good one even for a well experienced writer. so for a 12 year old this is awesome. i am sure that till now i didn't wrote a poem this much good

[Sofia]

Omg! Thanks so much for the compliment :) I'm so so so happy

[49k_jdys]

Great job! Your writing style seems much older than just 12 years old!

[Sofia]

Thank you so much! I'm sorry for the late reply. I appreciate your lovely review.

[Patricia Wedel]

A lovely poem of bees and nectar...
flowers galore and so
Much to explore... truly tantalizing....
Pat

[Sofia]

Thank you very much ma'am for the review. I'm grateful to you for it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right dear Sofia. Every season had it down-falls. Each is needed and can be dangerous. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sofia]

Thank you so much for appreciating it. I'm glad you liked it.
Will also give a read to your writings :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Sofia.

[Rahul]

First, i must congratulate you for dropping one of the very first pieces of your heart here around in guise of this "written-poetry". First poetry is always very special, and ev'n it should be well treasured with the "Verity" of words. My first poetry that i had written long back... back in 2012 is already gone into... trash with the crash of my window back in 2015. And i lost my every penny of stuff in that, and since then, i e'vn lost the loath of my "prime" inspiration to write as well, cos sometimes, some things belong not just to words, but to feelings, and when the feelings are trashed, or burnt or lost somewhere in the wisp of emptiness, it's hard to get back those SAME feelings in life in the SAME postulate of passion.

Nevermind, the poetry's very beautifully written. You must keep it safe for life. In future, it will always remind you, "where you were, and where you are by now". The choice of words's nice and creative. I might be taking a look at some of your work, shortly.

[Sofia]

Thank you for stopping by and giving this a read.. Yeah, you're right..this poetry is quite special to me cuz its my very first attempt..
I didn't actually get what you meant by the crash of a window..but sensing some kind of loss...I can only say that you must always continue to write..no matter what.. I'll surely read your works and review them :)

[Rahul]

Ah.. pleasure is.. ev'n it must be mine. xoxo
Well, window-crash is.. the "crash of window" -- the "computer" window, gurl. Hope it's makin' sense now. lol

[Sofia]

Lol! I figured it to be some kind of loss..hahaha..

[Rahul]

then glad to get things cleared around for you. haha!

[Sofia]

Hahaha! :D

[apennylate]

Shames my first poetry... You have a natural talent... The imagery borders on child-like (obviously)... But in a fantastic way... People crave relatability, and this was chock full of it! Keep writing... Very, very well penned...

[Sofia]

Can't believe you reviewed it.. I'm so happy seeing this review...as for your​ first poetry..I know it would have been excellent as always..but you know, I literally felt like jumping seeing your review😁
Thank you so much..😊

[apennylate]

D'aw, you make me feel quite appreciated, Sofia... No shame in jumping for joy, I sure as heck do it, lol... My first poem was REALLY not this good, I assure you... Good stuff, and I hope to see more of your writing develop in the future...! Have a great one

[Sofia]

I'll surely try to improve myself in the future..anyways, thank you for your time once again..

[apennylate]

Anytime, it is my pleasure... That is all we can hope to accomplish everyday... Improvement...!

[Davidgeo]

Well done. For a 12 year old you're a stud.

[Sofia]

Thank you for the kind visit and review. I appreciate it :)

[Abraham George]

you are very talented and don't stay here to read other's stories and poem. please keep writing . we are waiting to read your more writings . best wishes for your future.

[Sofia]

Thank you for all ur wishes...yeah, I'll be writing poems once agn when my unit tests are over...

[Paul Bell]

The contrast of spring heading into summer is quite stark. We pray for the sun here. But two weeks down the line. We're cracking up with it. Well done on your on your poem.

[Sofia]

So you've been living in a cold country..thank you for the review.. I'm glad you enjoyed it

[Zoya]

Well done for a first timer! The poem starts with a refreshing and vibrant tone. Towards the end, yeah...the summer part...shows how it causes a slight annoyance...a bit humorous ending. Well done!

[Sofia]

Thank you very much... I'm glad you found it to be well written :)

[Zoya]

no worries

[Sofia]

Ahaan! A martinian... where from?

[Zoya]

Lucknow. Are you one?

[Sofia]

Nope I'm from Kolkata and a Wellander :)

[Zoya]

Okay. Yeah...you might know about the Martinians living in Kolkata.

[Zoya]

oops...forgot to add a comma before 'living'

[Sofia]

Yeah we've got two La Martiniere schools here...no worries about the comma...

[Zoya]

Ah yeah, I know