I find the repetition in this poem quite good - the way you repeated one whole part of the poem again. It's delivery though, needs to be improved a bit, that's what I think. It jumps alot, so it might make someone confused although it has the same theme. Though overall, I think that it's quite good. Captures the emotion and the feeling many have when something they don't want to happen happens to them.
I find the repetition in this poem quite good - the way you repeated one whole part of the poem again. It's delivery though, needs to be improved a bit, that's what I think. It jumps alot, so it might make someone confused although it has the same theme. Though overall, I think that it's quite good. Captures the emotion and the feeling many have when something they don't want to happen happens to them.
I'm basically a social misfit that doesn't fit in with the misfits... And I don't try.
I love writing. Its truly my passion in the world. I think my inner writer uses my fingers as a channel, since I.. more..