The girl in the white dress

She wore a white lace and satin dress

It went up to her top knee

Guess who that was..

It was me

My hair was curly, soft, and down

People called me a Serly Temple comeback

She had green gray eyes that sparkled like the sun

And the most unique ring on

Others can feel the energy hovering around her

Sometimes they're rays of sunshine

Some are dark cloud surroundings

Then there was something peculiar

Her shoes.....

They were black converse

That were written on

It was the most unique statement

Author's Note

it does not ryhme but im a free verse girl

Reviews

[CindyLu]

I like this. A girl could put on a thousand different outfits and change people's cove-based opinion of her a thousand times, but it's not until they notice the thing that goes with everything she wears that can actually know who she is inside. One note, 'Serly' should probably be 'Shirley". A very creative write :)

[Snow Curls = ]]

thank you:)

[CreativeStroke]

This was an intriguing piece to me. The ending with the exposure of the black converse gave it some uniqueness and made it your very own creative work. I enjoyed it.

[Snow Curls = ]]

I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you:)

[Emily]

Very cool! You turned an prdinary event into something incredibly intriguing! Thank you for sharing!

[Snow Curls = ]]

Thank you for the comment and for taking the time to read it

[Tex]

you switch back and forth from third person to first person in this poem. that works well when you are trying to show disoreantation or confusion but I think the only place I would do it here is this line:

Guess who that was..
It was me

all other instances I think i would stay in the third person. But that is just me, and you are you, and this is your poem so you do exactly as you wish.

I liked this poem I feel it is the best of your work I have seen so far. Nicely done.

[Snow Curls = ]]

Thank you:)

[Deneru Yamada]

Nice! :)

[Snow Curls = ]]

thank you:)