Wondering

I lay my head down

On my knees

Crying as I

Think of you

And all our memories

We had made

Wondering if what

You did was

Worth losing me

 

Crying as I

Remember your hand

Holding mine

Your lips kissing

Mine

Telling me you

Love me

 

Feeling my heart break

As I see

You kiss her 

As I hear

You tell her

I love you

Like you used

To tell me

 

Wondering if you

Really meant those

Three words you

Said to me

Author's Note

honest thoughts...

Reviews

[Emberlorna]

It's a painful poem to read, kind of knocks the wind out of me to read it. Could defiantly feel your pain. Heart breaking, honest, raw. Well done :}

[Ashley]

I think we've all been in this situation, it's easily relatable. This poem is simple and gets right at the core issue. The breaks seem a little off, like "As I see/You kiss her" those parts might work better as one line. I'd like to see it expanded on, more imagery, more emotion, but that's just my opinion. Overall I liked it.

[Galyen]

Wow that was really good. I look forward to reading the rest of your work.

[Alice N.]

your one heck of an awesome person and if he cant see it then he can f**k himself cause he doesnt see how amazing of a person you are and i hope you find some made for unlike that bastered no effence

[SpokenWord]

You may never know if they meant those words when they said them too you, but also know they may not mean those words as they speak them to someone else. that is something to see your lover with another, this poem is sad but it is also lovely.

[JustJordan. x3]

i know how you feel. I've had this happen to me with a boy I thought i was gonna marry. My heart goes out to you.

[Luchia Noname]

aww i felt like crying if he cant see her than he doesn't deserve her!

[Calypso]

Wow. Love bites. I can't believe you have been hurt so bad.

[pamzilla. &hear..]

1. That guy is a B*****d.
2. He needs to be neutered.
3. I fiddleybopping love this poem, despite the way it screams Sadness and Hurt.
4. I sincerely hope you find a Man, because he was obviously a Boy.
5. And preferably one that treats you right.

[John]

Having been in a similar situation, I can't tell how much this made sense to me. Don't lose hope you'll find someone.