Broken

I'm living

But I'm not all there

There's a part of me missing

The part that lets me love

All because you left me

For some other girl

Saying I'm not pretty enough

Laughing when I cry

Laughing at my heart shattering

When i begged for you back

You laughed

All because of you

I lost the will to love

Author's Note

honest opion

Reviews

[kill the innocents]

very honest.. good job

[Preston Lynch]

wow...

[KaySea]

this is so sad. i can feel the pain

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem was direct and the story in your words powerful and with purpose. I believe in karma. Better to be kind and use your words correctly. Words can do great damage. In the end the people who use and abuse will pay for their deeds. It is a sad poem. You wrote it with strong statements and a very sad ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Keriun]

You really need to space out the different parts of it. Clumping them all up together in particularly this poem doesn't make it strong at all. Nice try anyway :)

[Dom]

This had great emotion in it. Great job!

[Maylin, Rise]

I really enjoyed this piece, it gets ur mind thinking of a worst case scenario to go with the poem, which is great. You should read my poem "The Actor" it has kinda the same concept, hope u like it. =)

[Hippy]

thats sad to be hurt by a human they are terrible creatures

[sweetylee1994]

shattered, tainted because of what? Some heartless devil who gives not a care for love. Not a single emotion for emotion. Nicely written, I feel your pain.

[-_Josh's Monala_-]

It is open and meaningful, i liked lines 9-13, it has a clear concept