Mirror

I see this girl in front of me

I see her pain and misery

I see the bruises on her face

I see her most painful memory

When she cried for you

You never came

You just pushed her away

The girl i see decided to end it all

She punched the mirror

And cut her wrist

But that was the girl i saw

Not me

I just walked away

Author's Note

tell me your honest opinon

Reviews

[sweetylee1994]

wow. thats all I can say-wow. incredible details.

[Sexy P3nguin]

My honest opinion is it's amazing. It has a powerful feel to it and overall a great poem. The only problem I found was that the flow was a lil choppy a times but you recovered well. Nice write.

[heido]

I enjoyed this.
It has potential.
If you become more aware of the flow of the poem it'll help you get your point across better.
'Try beginning each line with words not usually meant for the beginning of sentences.
Challange yourself!

[Keriun]

WOO~ BEST POEM among the three :D No complains here, it's just awesome.

[mystic soul]

you presented a very sadistic picture of a girl going through breakup... nice write!

[itsjustme]

i got confused when you introduced "you" into the poem however the beginning is good in imagery and the ending has a powerful statement to it i enjoyed the piece :)