Lessons from Mangled U

Tearing pieces from my mangled skin
I fear it has become too thin
Worn from cardiac oppression

Peeling and picking pieces from my nails
Listen for the mothers' wails
Carried by a marked aggression

Ripping at my battered lips
Nasty secrets and cursed slips
Aid in our regression

Bloated with your hearts desires
As deceivers laugh and conspire
And ask for my concessions

Standing on shaky and broken limbs
Defiant against the universe' whims
The trials instilled the lessons

Reviews

[Bluefire]

"Standing on shaky and broken limbs
Defiant against the universe' whims
The trials instilled the lessons"
~*~
Beautiful macabre, enchanting insanity.
Well done. ^^

[HeazerH]

Thank you. I enjoyed writing this one. I was feeling empowered that day lol

[Bluefire]

It shows. You're welcome. ^^

[Jamil Isimbabi]

nice poem. i think the last stanza says most about the whole poem

[HeazerH]

Thanks, I like a strong ending when I write.

[Caradoc]

That final stanza packs a punch. It holds a great message of standing strong in the face of the hardships that life can throw at you. In fact, the theme seems central to this piece, which I think many can relate to. You describe in such a harsh way, it certainly works up the imagination.

Well written.

-Caradoc

[HeazerH]

Thanks. The last verse is the most important, it is awesome that you caught that.

[Bowers]

This is beautiful, to me it seems, a rather elegant piece, and I love that, great write!

[HeazerH]

Thank you. It means a lot to me that you (or anyone, really) enjoys my work.

[Bowers]

your very welcome! :D

[A. Amos]

As always brilliant piece of work, keep on creating the magic with your beautiful words

[HeazerH]

Thanks :) I always appreciate your kind comments.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome, we are friends and I love reading your work:)

[HeazerH]

I'm glad to call you a friend, and honored that you like my work. :)

[A. Amos]

Honor and pleasure is all mine, i'm one of those who value friendship and mean it:)

[HeazerH]

:) :) :) i value your friendship as well.

[A. Amos]

Thank you my friend

[wordman]

and I will come back stronger we all are tested I guess it`s how you fair

[HeazerH]

This is true :)

[HeazerH]

Thanks for reading

[wordman]

you are welcome

[Sami Khalil]

"Standing on shaky and broken limbs
Defiant against the universe' whims
The trials instilled the lessons"

A powerful write indeed. Tests and trials of life can instill lasting lessons in us. Bravo...............

[HeazerH]

Thank you. :). :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)....................